Damn girl, I see you lying there half naked with your long sultry hair.
Breasts lookin all fine and those panties you like to wear.
This isn't going to be a rose peddled moment or a candle lit night.
I'm not going to break out a bottle of champagne or dim the bright light.
This is a freaky moment girl.
The kind that you like.
I'm feelin freaky girl.
I'm gonna ride ya like a two seated bike.
I'm gonna ride ya from the front.
Then I'll ride ya from the rear.
I'm gonna smack your firm ass and grab hold of your hair.
This is a freaky moment girl.
One that we just can't resist.
I'm gonna tear off all your clothes girl and tie you up by the wrist.
I'll nibble at all those parts that make you go please.
From your inner thighs to the back of your knees.
Don't worry girl, I'll get to that sensitive place that makes you feel hot.
Then I'll get real freaky and slide lower to even a dirtier spot.
You like that girl?
You like what you're feelin?
Like Marvin Gay said, it's a sexual healin.
Oh yes, you like this don't you girl?
You like when I grab your nipples and give em a twirl.
I hear you moaning.
I can feel you squirm.
You moan with ecstasy and squirm like a worm.
It's all good girl.
The freaks come out at night.
Don't battle it girl.
It's just a losin fight.
Oh yes girl, put your tongue right there.
I love when you do that girl and how you don't even care.
You're a freak girl.
You know that you are.
You're the freakiest girl I ever met by far.
The way you'll put your tongue in a dirty place.
The way you're willing to take a load in the middle of the face.
Two freaks, freakin for this moment.
So freaky a porn star wouldn't condone it.
That was good girl.
We'll do it again when the mood is right.
Until then girl.
Have a freaky dreamy night.
Author notes
sexy enough?
FAVORITE COLOR..BLACK
option # 4...pappacass
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A contest entry
- "When I'm good I'm very, very good but when I'm bad I'm better." by Asylaarix.
800 points, ended July 7, 2008, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Porn on Paper: Eroticism Welcome Here by alaskanamber.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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950 points, ended April 27, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Um, yes please...LoL
Being a freak myself..LoL...I'm really likin this write. "You like what you're feelin? Like Marvin Gay said, it's a sexual healin." - thats hott.
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Wow that's good!
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Da' Freaky da' better....Marvin Gaye always has a way of making her give it up...works every time
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Excellent use of rhytm in this piece, thanx, poet...
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I would say yes, this is sexy enough! Very hot and indeed freaky with a great rythym. Cool pic/video also!
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HOT DAMN!!! This was some good ass erotica. I especially loved the lines 'You like that girl? You like what you're feelin? Like Marvin Gay said, it's a sexual healin' And the line 'I'm gonna ride ya like a two seated bike.' it was very sexy. I hope this doesn't sound offending but...are you black?
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hey got damn! i loved the lyrics hon
you said a whole lot of shit i like dammit
i like being tied up ooooooooooooooooooh warning never send things like this to me i am not responsible for crashin your p c
this was poppin P
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you got me feelin a litttle freaky.
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Lol - tanzanite says it's a rap song ... I can see a country and western thing going on here
Definitely more lyrics than a write, but I've never been able to write lyrics so my hat is off to you!
yes, the punctuation DOES need work, but I have to admit that you had me wondering whether you can do hardcore and sensual ... strangely I haven't decided which this is ...
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Yes, it has great flow. Yes it should be a rap song and yes, it certainly rocks the hot-o-meter. Why did you put a full stop at the end of every line? I think the punctuation needs some work. Also, healing instead of heeling, or was that intentional? I can see why you got awards for this, but in my mind it still needs some work.
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Verry hot I enjoyed this.
Thanks for entering, good luck
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I'm feelin freaky!!!
Yeah so this is going to help me a whole lot. Is the title mis-pelled on purpose? Just curious. I the judge not the editor this week. I really liked this. Enough to read it aloud a couple times. The flow is great. Good luck. -
Hot.
This was great. i can see it being a rap. some of it made me laugh and... well just great.
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damn. this was hot. i dunno about cute..but it was hot. nice visuals!! good luck1
xoxo
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This was so hot ... and so funny ... and it was just so cute ... I loved it ... you put yourself into it ... a touch of yourself is never a bad thing ... it's hot ... thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest ...
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Hot!!
ooooo lala I like this one! you did great...any fantasy a gurl would dream of! wow u know exactly how to please a woman, this is amazingly written. Good luck in the contest! I entered it too!
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great use of freaky. thanks for entering my contest and sharing your naughty talent with me.
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DAAAMMMNNNN!!!!!!
That is fucking sexy, no forced words and that is great... I love how it flows and you can read it fast and get the feeling that way...
~Maria
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ARE YOU TALKING TO ME????? Boy do you have my number....... Hahahha.......This was awesome!!! Now why did I enter????
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Hot
This is one hot poem, this is a very erotic poem, and you did it without making it trashy, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Love Marvin Gaye, Sexual Healing
this was full of imagery, hot and steamy passion.
Thanks for sharing,
ephiphany♥
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Ah haaaa sounds like a night in my bedroom. lol This is great. I love it when men express how freaky they like ther gals. I am a freak and I take it as a great complament! Wonderful little read.
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Nice lyrical tone to this and good rhyming and overall a good write BUT this doesn't hv a place in this kind of a contest.Thanks for entering
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Wow, I need a cold shower and then find my man! Wow! Not only does it get your juices flowing, your rhyme is perfect, I absolutely positively loved it. You have a fantastic knack for erotica, you should write more of it. I know that I would read it! LOL My friend, you rock, keep on writing!
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I think I just had an orgasm ..................
Jeusus H christ I fuckin lov'd this
U do know how to get a girl with ur words, in all the right HOTT ways
WOW
Thank you so much for entering and Good Luck
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this was freaken awsome
your flow was perfect
and this put a smille on my face
lol
mmmmmmmmmmm
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