Under Construction
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Inspired by this song:
http://youtube.com/watch?v=hPGEym7tiPg
A contest entry
- For all of the CRAZY poets out there... by AutumnsFlame.
973 points, ended March 15, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Dance with me in the light of our Venus Moon.
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Oh, I love this. It's beautiful.
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You know I'm not good at explaining why I like things, but this is my favorite of your poems.
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This was a good poem. It didn't BLOW MY MIND but it was pretty good. There are a few places with forced rhyme that threw me off, but other than that it was a decent poem. Thank you for entering my contest!
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it reminds me of a song by My Dying Bride called "The Scarlet Garden"
I love it...
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The careful application of fear is also an effective form of communication.
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wow...!
"this unforgiving graveyard of Time" I love that line! Reading some parts of this poem is like looking into a mirror of my own thoughts. Parts of it I don't pretend to understand properly... but I love it all!
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Excellent write It has a wonderful flow and I like the way it rhymes You did an excellent job with the inspiration from the song
Cara 
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Thank you!!! I just got the new HIM album, so all the songs on it are keeping my writing endlessly. If you'd like to read another one with song inspiration, you might like this one: http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3764544
Thanks again for reading and commenting, I will return the favor!!
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