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My First and Last

(last One)
A Second Chance

A head full of angry,
A heart full of stress,
I've been writing now,
Trying to give it by best.

But you,
You took it away.
When you left...
After you promised you stay.

Its a break not a break up.
So leave her alone.
I gave you a second chance.
Twenty chances ago.

But I can't stop my heart,
when it beats for only you,
And I can't stop my lips,
from longing for you too.

Now I,
I feel you in my veins,
And you,
You're getting in the way.

Its a break not a break up.
So leave her alone.
I gave you a second chance.
Twenty chances ago.

I gave you a second chance,
I gave you the air in my lung,
I gave you it all,
I hope you had your fun.

Its a break not a break up.
So leave her alone.
I gave you a second chance.
Twenty chances ago.

I gave you forever.
But you said no.
I wanted you here,
but you let me go...
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3764494


My First

Head Against the Sky (I can't move)
The tears you've cried fall softly down,
The floor becomes bloody as you hit the ground,
You can't go far with your head against the sky,
You can't get far with no wings to fly,

Your dreaming a reality,
Your living insanity,
Your not the only one,
No your not the only one,

Hide your smile and cry your tears,
Hate your dreams and love your fears,
Just don't wait up for me,
No just don't wait up for me

Your dreaming a reality,
Your living insanity,
Your not the only one,
No your not the only one,

Peel the sins off your eyes,
With hollow disgust in your lies,
Scream to me the songs of the stars,
Playing tag with headlights of the cars,

Your dreaming a reality,
Your living insanity,
Your not the only one,
No your not the only one,

Sleep beautiful one,
The night has just begun,
Your heart bleeds eternally,
Your heart bleeds for all to see,
http://allpoetry.com/poem/1381408

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  • carole21
    February 5, 2008

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    unusual

    nice but unusual take on the prompt . . a bit long but I liked "Its a break not a break up" and "You can't get far with no wings to fly" . . probably you're would work better than your . .


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    I love the metaphors and poetic devices used in My First. In A Second Chance, you moved totally into personalized writing that lost some of the poetic form and devices. Ty so much for entering... I do, I do, I do love My First.

  • Fools Like Me
    January 2, 2008
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    Good Luck