Trust is eroded as tears fall like rain,
leaving fragile dreams immersed in pain.
Your smiles enchanted my lonely heart,
yet your lies slowly tore it apart.
My stomach's heaving with anxiety,
shunning all the rules of propriety.
By placing you first you placed me last,
banishing love to a distant past.
I remember the comfort of your hugs,
your impish grin and those innocent shrugs.
I recall the pure charm of it all,
and how you made me feel ten feet tall.
Your cheating only grew over the years,
hard to believe I lived with those fears.
I’ll miss the wisdom within our talks,
and how your stories endeared our walks.
You chose a path I could not follow,
which left me feeling somehow hollow.
Your pouting look, begs forgiveness still,
pleading you love me and always will.
Your plan was perfect, with just one flaw,
you callously loaded the final straw.
My heart’s no longer a thing of joy,
it’s split asunder like a broken toy.
A contest entry
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425 points, ended January 5, 2008, 23 entries
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the rhyming is seemless
yes failed relationships happens when there's no trust
You chose a path I cannot follow,
which leaves me feeling somehow hollow.
Your pouting look begs forgiveness still,
pleading you love me and always will.
this part stood out for me
this is exquisitely done from beginning to end
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I can relate to this one Emile. You made a very painful memory come to life for me. I know just what this poem is saying and it is a torture no one needs to go through.
I remember the passion of your hugs
your impish grin and those innocent shrugs.
I recall the pure charm of it all
and how you made me feel ten feet tall.
When you have such trust in a person and they make life seem to perfect, to have it all pulled out from under you is the most evil of pains.
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There is so much emotion in this poem. I love it! Thank you for sharing it...Patty
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"Trust has eroded away again,
leaving fragile dreams immersed in pain."
that's a beautiful line right there! -
This is a great poem you wrote. Well done dear poet. Thank you for putting in the number in your your authors comment box. Best of luck in my contest
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