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Salvage the Forgotten

Missing image

 

 

 

 

I have a carved box buried in my heart.

 

When the receding rush begins to fade,

 

when there is little difference

between looking back and the future,

 

between who I was and might be;

 

I pick through the scattered debris,

salvage the forgotten,

 

claim the fragmented treasures left behind

before time begins to wash away the past.

 

And I remember to breathe.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Image: http://rustajb.deviantart.com/art/when-the-tide-goes-out-255309

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  • malmadre gold member
    January 13, 2008
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    I ab'soul'utly love what you have written here and the background...O!


  • Denierim
    January 13, 2008

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    Wuah I love this! I love the depth you put to this piece, looking to the future and wondering how close it might be to the past... That's what I saw in this piece. How the past and future collide together in the moment we live in... Beautiful, beautiful piece of poetry!

    The opening and ending lines are very strong, and I adore the background you used for this one. Thanks for adding this one to the contest; I love this one a lot!

  • Nighttime angel
    January 10, 2008

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    you did an excellent job on the prompt. I really enjoyed reading the whole poem, I can also relate in many ways. the first line is very powerful to me, as well the last one.
    I love the background that you created also.

    good luck in the contest.

    kat


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 5, 2008

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    Wow. What an excellent take on the prompt here. Every line seems to hold this incredible intensity moving from one to the next. Depth of ache apparent, and yet hopeful in its entirety... to hold onto the memories...

    The opening line itself just blew me away. Wonderful write!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    Oh my.....
    This was such a pleasant read. With a great message.
    and your backgrounds and presentation of you writing is always so pleasing to the eye.

    Best of luck in the contest.


    Delila


  • February Moon gold member
    January 3, 2008

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    This is totally amazing. Really quiet beautiful.
    Chelsea


  • Beauty Of Silence
    January 3, 2008

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    WOW!

    This poem left me breathles... definitely! i'm speechless... your poem is amazing! the spaces left between each stanza was great for this poem... and you kept it so real and fresh!

    The backgroud suited the picture and this refreshing poem very well! i wish you all the best in this contest! Take care...


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 2, 2008

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    I could feel the ache and release in this. Truly a most introspective and moving work you have created here. Touching, real, and alive. Simply brilliant. ~Pamela

  • Suzanne Dia
    January 2, 2008

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    I love the introspection of this. And that you described a moment we all come to in life that I don't think I would have been able to.

    This is really beautiful.




    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      January 3, 2008
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      Suzanne, I think you under estemate yourself...

      there are no limits when words and soul dance. I simply look at a picture once for a moment and then write what ever comes when I close my eyes.

      thanks for reading.

      Ken

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