A pencil sits in the artist's still hand,
Pointing at the blank canvas before them.
Suddenly moving, without reprimand,
Sketching a picture: an artistic gem.
Starting with a soft outline of a head
On a frame of a body that seems frail.
Creativity takes over instead,
Carefully adding painstaking detail.
Curve, line, and shadow all flow together
with vibrant color, variety amass;
The eyes finished, He could not tell whether
Their beauty's apart from that of stained glass.
The body is smooth, the face without crease;
The artist sits back in contemplation.
He had created a new masterpiece...
God's gift to Earth: a human creation.
Author notes
http://tetty.deviantart.com/art/Lets-draw-49751602
Marked for gold judging. ^.^
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest (January) by Denierim.
1000 points, ended February 3, 2008, 26 entries
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Comments
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This is great
I do portraits self taught and I had an art teacher tell me once when she was in a hospitol waiting room she told me never erase your first lines you draw for they are the correct lines often you erase and before the picture is completed you will end up putting the same lines down again. I love to draw
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Gorgeous! I definitely loved this one.
For one thing, creativity is a an attribute I treasure above all others. In friends, in lovers, in anyone - creativity is one of the most - if not the most - important characteristic that draws me to that person.
Artists are truly a race of their own. Our minds are so different than those of other humans. I can't imagine what it's like to not be artistically-inclined or uninspired or not creative... all the time. I go crazy for the short periods of time I am uninspired. I think you, as artistic and creative as you are, can understand and relate to this.
Two lines that didn't feel right to me:
"The eyes finished, he could not tell whether
their beauty's apart from that of stained glass"
I think you meant to say that he couldn't tell if the eyes' beauty was separate from stained glass... maybe? LOL. I don't know what I'm missing here, but the wording felt awkward and left me furrowing my brows (don't really need to contribute to the fine brow lines appearing on my forehead - lol).
Great job!!!
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Actually, you found the two lines I had the most trouble with. (hehe....^.^') I was trying to say that the eye's beauty was as beautiful as stained glass, but I couldn't find a good way to keep the rhyme, syllable count, and idea all in one any other way. It still sounds awkward even to me, the author.
But the rest seemed to flow a lot better.
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This is a realy nice piece of poetry.
I liked your rhyme scheme very much.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest, -
Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest Good Luck
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I like this one, how you showed the work of an artist by each word. Starting from the empty canvas and going forward to create a new masterpiece. I like that a lot in this poem. I like the rhyme, it flows well with the words without any awkwardness (that I would've noticed). The ending wasn't quite as strong as the beginning, but I adore the meaning of these words. I see strength in them; how you can create something of your own if you just try your very hardest.
Thanks for sharing this with us and wonderful work with this poem!
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Well done. Good rhymes in this. The last line in the third stanza seems slightly awkward. Other than that good job. Good luck.
Chelsea
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Thanks; I tried to make it seem less awkward while keeping 10 syllables (a little quirk of mine). I appreciate you pointing that out.
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Much better now.
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Wow. You have done such a wonderful job. Truly there must be an artists hand behind your pen. Well done to the picture prompt. I did enjoy this very much. ~Pamela
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AHHHH So jealous of this it is an awesome poem. You did a great take on the picture Good luck in the contest Cara
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is that your age lol Good luck in the contest Dear I will come back after you have written it to comment
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