Secrets, puzzled in black and whites
of first promises portrayed held captive,
entangled in scattered pictures of yesterdays.
A precious story from long ago
secrets kept like impervious knots,
As mangled wire in the mind.
Like opals in the sky, a never-ending supply
held and admired in the puzzled mind.
many pictures taken, making this secret one of a kind.
The future is a place often traveled
looking for choices made through recent times.
A heart grasped by hand’s of perfection.
Lips covered by hands of steel
Your secrets are safe
within this deranged mind...
Forever held captive
Sealed in three-dimension
Pictures holding words, of secrets never told.
Author notes
http://theperfectlestat.deviantart.com/art/Stay-In-My-Past-13379791
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Contest (January) by Denierim.
1000 points, ended February 3, 2008, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on the silver trophy. That picture is so... unsettling and... most definitley I can see how you would be entranced and inspired enough to have written soemthing for the contest... and you did a great job. I really admired it. Well done...
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Excellent
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!
This write is fantastic.
Congratulations on your most deserved Silver trophy win.
VERY well deserved.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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the language is beautiful. good luck in the contest.
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this poem is very intreguing. It's very well written and the tone and diction combine to create a sense of beautiful insanity. I feel like a secret trapped in this poem! I love how the last line finishes it off, very well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Secrets are strong and I like their concept in stories and poems. There are so many ways to see secrets. They are kept to keep those close to you happy, or just not to hurt anyone. But some do hurt others in the end, which makes it a dangerous thing. But as a concept it really is a very wide and difficult subject which you captured so well.
You did well with the picture. I like the depth you put to this write and I love the wording. I would like to ask though... The first line of the second-last stanza, is the last word meant to be "steal" or "steel"? Might be just my bad English but it started bothering me... lol
All in all, I like this poem a lot. Thanks for sharing it and good luck!
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You were right steel, thank you for noticing this... All fixed now, and also yes I agree with you on how secrets can also bring harm and so on...
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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For this not being done yet, it is truly well done. Quiet enjoyable, very well done.
Chelsea
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Wow. You have written well to your picture prompt. I enjoyed this very much. Such a tight and twisted piece, like the image. Well done. ~Pamela
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Excellent Poem Dear I really like it You did a great job with the prompt I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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Please let me know your allpoetry username so I can send you the picture link, thank you!
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creationsfromheart
Sorry
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