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Melted Eyes

 

 

Eyes reflect a liquid moon
that drips from the melted skies
and pools in the lakes and oceans,
streams of silver light.

Strings of mercury.

Metallic rainbows of dragonflies
reflect the celestial glow.
As the May beetles dance
on breaths and breezes,
jeweled scarabs,
swaying to a cicada's hum.

Wings drenched in stardust,
cool shimmering ashes

that coats the fur of rabbits
that huddle under bushes,
their black eyes sparkling.

Fireflies float on wisps of air,
dancing stars caught in nets,
trapped in glass jars.
Perfect prisons.
 

Maybe the world will be happy now,

on these starry summer nights.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Melted Dawn
Inspired by the picture above. It's sooooo cute.

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Comments

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  • penman gold member
    January 15, 2008
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    Excellent

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Denierim
    January 5, 2008

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    Wuah! I love the world you created for this one, and I got completely lost in it while reading this. Beautiful imagery filled with beautiful words... And it went so well with the picture. I was a bit worried to put this picture on the list, I admit, because it's such a darn cute picture... But you took all the beauty in it and added your own, and that just makes it such a great compination! And now I'm babbling... lol

    All in all, this is a beautiful, beautiful work of art! Thanks for sharing this one with all of us!


  • creationsfromheart
    January 5, 2008

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    What an adorable picture

    You done a awsome write here, As I read this I drifted away in a fantasy land and could see the fireflies dancing in the mind, wonderfu write!


  • Flare the Arcphoenix
    January 4, 2008

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    Sounds like text that comes straight out of a fantasy novel...great imagery; I liked how you described moonlight. Good job, and good luck in the contest!
    --Daniel (aka: Flare)
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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    How beautifully creative. Well done to your picture prompt. I did enjoy this very much. ~Pamela

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