When I sit there and reminisce,
there are so many things I miss
like the reassurance of your touch
that held me close in time of sadness.
There is sweetness in every woe
and even in the things we can't seem to let go.
The unnecessary arguments never mean much;
they only stain our heart with regrets.
We live to learn, all birds must perch and rest.
When we hold on to our prides and not forgive and forget;
we drift away like smoke in endless wind
our spirit then sinks like water in the sands.
Will you ever curse these lips that made you smile,
now frigid; can't help but to make you cry?
If I could go back to the hands of times,
I'd adore you more than anything;
for sweet honey comes from bees that sting...
Author notes
Mr. Mack
Gummy bears will soon take over the world
A contest entry
- Love Poems. by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 49 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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This is a wonderful poem.. and I am glad you
brought it to my contest.
Best of luck to you with it.
Riftkin
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A lovely poem. Good luck in my contest
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I really love the authors notes!!! LOL! Good Write Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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Nice
I love that closing line. Very good poem. Thank you! Best of luck!
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I loved this. The stanza's read smoothly. I hardly noticed the rhyming because it rhymed so well. It wasn't forced at all. The metaphors and imagery was amazing.
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awh this is sweet
great write
thanks for entering
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Wow; such a gorgeous write
filled with many emotions
loved it!!
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"sweet honey comes from bees that sting... "
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Nice imagery and very nice wording in this. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Such moving words. I like the part that said will you ever curse these lips that made you smile...Thank you for entering
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Very nice indeed.
I like the ryhming and how you
catch the readers eye.
Good job.
-Mandi
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another nice entry from you, nice to see these love poems so forth coming thank you and good luck
Lin
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i appriciate your entry to the contest and i feel you are not original for this contest you have won an extensive amount for this poem and i am hoping for a personalized poem thank you and good luck in the contest
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I like the sporadic ryming! Exactly how I hoped ryming would be done. I can really understand the part with the unnecessary arguments. However, I dont really understand the line about the bird metaphor. Thanks for entering! and good luck!
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beautiful write it deffinatly capters your feelings for the other person. good luck in the contest
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good job
good luck
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This is really really beautiful!
"If I could go back to the hands of times,
I'd adore you more than anything;
for sweet honey comes from bees that sting..."
^^Very powerful!
This poem is one of my favorites so far!
Thanks so much for entering my contest!
Good luck!
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Adorable!
This was really sweet, and touching. I liked this one a lot, it was well done. Thanks for entering -good luck! -
i love this poem, but i dont really see how it fits with the prompt "though my heart may be broken, i can still love with all the little pieces"
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this is really good. i love the diction!
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Wonderfully Written
It was sad =(
Favorite Part:
We live to learn, all birds must perch and rest.
When we hold on to our prides and not forgive and forget;
we drift away like smoke in endless wind
our spirit then sinks like water in the sands.
I also loved the line:
"for sweet honey comes from bees that sting..."
That was beautiful
Thanks for sharing this in my contest
Good Luck!
♥[Katee]♥
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Kind of sad in a way. I think everyone has moments like this. Regrets over an argument, etc. The key is to learn from them and move on. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Lovely
If I could go back to the hands of times,
I'd adore you more than anything;
for sweet honey comes from bees that sting...
Oh and this is so very true. I never ever thought of it that way before but as you said: for sweet honey comes from bees that sting...
Wow I think that you just summed up every relationship here on earth.
If you want something good, you have to be willing to deal with the bad. Nothing is ever perfect, even perfect has it's bad reflections, and we are all just the same and searching, for something pure and sweet and true, just as the honey from the bees, that sting!
Bravo bravo bravo!
Thank you so much for sharing this with me!
It is much appreicated.
Have a great day.
God Bless
Good luck in your contest!
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I love this. It's so beautiful and touching. I could really feel the emotions in this and it made me feel like crying a bit, which not many poems seem to do. Wonderful write and thanks for entering.
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This was a lovely write, and it was a unique way of looking at the picture! You have a different perception of the picture, which is good! This poem was well written! Your lines were raw with powerful emotions! Thanks for this amazing write!
~Ranji
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Very very nice. Awesome.
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This is beautiful, you really do need to let go of pride and just go for that love that you know is real. I'm still reading entries so I can't place this yet, but I'm sure I'll be back. Best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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Very good I liked it
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this is really sad and touching. It is a masterpiece all on its own. Great work and good luck in the contest!
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for sweet honey comes from bees that sting..."
beautiful write! it flows very nicely. i think the last stanza is my favorite line.. but the whole thing is very very good. it makes it hard to choose 
well done.
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i like this keep it up...this is good!
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Very well done.I love all of it but my favorite lines are,"There is sweetness in every woe", I so agree with that. My other favorite line is, "for sweet honey comes from bees that sting", so simple yet so profound. thanx for such beauty, conni
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I love the last line "sweet honey comes from birds that sting" cos its so true. We seem to fall for people who make us "sting". I also love the metaphore about the water falling through sand, it is a very powerful image.
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I wasn't really looking for heartache in my contest to be honest with you. I thought that this was very creative though.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is an amazing piece!
The rhythm of this poem is off. But I think that there is no other way for this poem to have such a great meaning. It really shows what you are trying to portray... The thought stays straight, with words and sentences that just grab you heart. Keep on writing these masterpieces!
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Nice!
"we drift away like smoke in endless wind" if it only be still for just a moment what we could do with it...
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AH! I love this oohh sooo much! I love the passion and emotion you put into it, "
Will you ever curse these lips that made you smile, " Thats genius, Congratz, You deserv 10 applauds, But youll need to survive with 3. I love this so much
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So very true, love can be so sweet yet it can be so painful. Sometimes we feel we could return to a good time but usually we can't because it is too late. Great writting and expressing yourself.
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Ahhhh...True to the soul love, its beautiful, yet it can be deadly. Good Poem.
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I really feel this, iove it! Really good work, bravo
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this has an insane amount of emotion i love it and the pain is definetly evident i love it. the imagery is great and the poem is short but gets everything out that needs to be said great job and good luck.
this is my favorite line
"Will you ever curse these lips that made you smile,
now frigid; can't help but to make you cry?"
its my favorite part because it makes you think of all the things people say to each other after a breakup even though at one time all they could do was sing the persons praises. -
wow..
wow this was a very graphic poem. it like, painted a picture in my head. I believe it was very well written. I enjoyed reading it, Anyway, just thought i would let you know, If you'd like you can stop by and read some of mine..L@ter
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aw so much truth spoken in these words and so many times people get hurt from them words, I do think words hurt more than sticks and stones, they are forever scaring. I enjoyed reading this ever so much.
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this is great
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i understand and feel the emotion in this beautiful write. this was written well. thanks for the read.
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"These lips that made you smile, now frigid;
can't help but to make you cry.
If I could go back to the hand of times,
I'd adore you more than anything;
for I know, sweet honey comes from bees that sting..."
I like the irony at the end,it is so typical of a lot of relationships.
Leaves you wondering if we know what the problem is why can't we fix it?
We all love honey so I guess that means we'll keep on
getting hurt.
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I have been there
thats for sure. I thought you did a great job w/ this write.
Take Care and good luck!
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There is sweetness in every woe
and even in the things we can't seem to let go.
The unnecessary arguments never mean much;
they only stain our heart with regrets.
a very loving piece...sweet
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Awesome!
Hey whats up? I have read a lot of your poetry and a lot of your poetry has either the longing for a love or remeberence of a hurt, ect ect.
When you find a love that fills your heart and soul to the point of you know there can be no one to replace it and the other person feels the same way is when you find happiness. I hope you find this or have found this...
And the last phrase..
sweet honey comes from bees that sting
I may have once agreed with that statement I have also heard about Thorn birds who only sing beautiful songs when they are pirched on a thorn in pain... I think of childbirth for some reason when I hear that..
But there can be a calmness..
When things reach equilibruim, for example a cold pot of water boils on an oven because the metal reaches the temperature of the stove and eventually the water in the pot reaches the same temperature as the metal from the pot which is the same temperature as the stove..
and when this happens arguements seem to cease to exist everything being equal
this same thing will happen for you, you will find a love that has passion as you and love and longing as you do to be equal. The longing in your peotry shows this.
I wish you the best!
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