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I never knew

I choose no name I never knew.
I would have vowed all my love for you.
Many month's faded me by

and still I never knew.
I suffered pain down this lane

and still I never knew.


I became weak with little strength

and still I never knew.
There can be no greater love than yours
because your life was laid down for mine
I became weak with little strength.

But then I knew .
you flow away to be at rest .
So now I know I shall let you rest.
May all of your days be blessed.

Author notes


Abortion. You have had one, how does it feel?
This poem was written through the experience of a very bad miscarriage and I had to have a abortion
were I almost lost my live and the doctors said I was lucky to be alive
prewrite panarama

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  • whos my humblepie
    August 19, 2008
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    You should change this line in your authors notes "Abortion. You have had one, how does it feel?"
    change it to 'have you had one, how does it feel?'

    Not everyone has had an abortion nor has everyone had a miscarriage.

    The poem was good, I enjoyed it but feel it could use a little work.


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    June 14, 2008
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    Is beautiful hun *wipes away a tear*

  • Virgoan
    March 30, 2008

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    I like the second stanza it gives the readers an in depth feeling of your perspective.

    Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

    HENSLEY

  • Mom of Blondes
    February 14, 2008

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    So sad!

    It seems you never even knew you were pregnant until it was ending. That is so sad!! I am so sorry you had to go through this. The pain and emotion is so clear.

    I've had two miscarriages in the same year and it was very hard for me, though I didn't come close to losing my life, it did send me into a depression after losing the second one.

    I think it very brave of you to share such an emotional experience with us.

    Rachael


  • hey charlie
    February 1, 2008

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    The story in your author note is sad, but the poem doesn't do it justice. You weren't consistant in your rhyming and you phrased some things oddly. Thanks for entering.


  • SignifyingNothing
    February 1, 2008
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    In the third to last line, should that be 'flow' or 'flew?' Not sure.

    I don't really understand "many month's faded me by" is the 's supposed to be there?

    I like the first two lines best. They really are intriguing and a good beginning to the poem.


  • DAMSELx
    January 20, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem; I am a fan of poetry with little words because that is when you leave it to emotion to captivate the reader, which you did very well.

    Good luck to you and thank you for entering!


  • Doomsday Clock
    January 5, 2008

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    Short, but if it were any longer, it wouldn't have as much impact. Really well written and heartfelt. Well done


  • Xx Luna xX
    January 5, 2008
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    Beautiful!

    This is so beautiful and filled with emotion. Thank you so much for entering and good luck!


  • UnchartedPoet
    January 2, 2008

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    Such a feeling that one has experienced in some way, some time in their own life. Great passion, great depth, good flow and enjoyed indeed.

    Jen


  • MourningSun
    January 2, 2008
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    I thought this was deep and touching. Good job.


  • maralisa silver member
    January 2, 2008
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    personal experiance

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