You left me all alone in a cold place that you called your heart.
You said in here my dear you are safe.
You promised me always and forever,
But now you simply say, “We are just not working”
Have I not tried my best, gave you my all.
Damn don’t you remember you said you’d never let me fall
Am I your fool or merely a tool?
Did you have fun?
So what if I call you Hun,
Does it annoy you?
Do you feel like a toy?
You’re the one playing games
Driving me insane
Do you think I’m immune to pain?
No! what you see is not rain,
It’s my tears flowing from my soul,
Of course I don’t feel fucking whole
But a standing ovation for you, you’ve reached your goal.
A contest entry
- GET NOTICED!!!! by Nighttime angel.
625 points, ended January 13, 2008, 88 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I must agree with the other comment...that line stucked in my head....
Ofcourse I don't feel fucking whole...
Thank you for fixing the background, I could eassily read it now
Maybe my own PC is the troublemaker...I didn't wanted to be one too
The only thing is that I missed your AP name...just as the one rule of three stated, I will be waiting for that...
Good luck in my contest
XXJeannette
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Please fix the background a little, I could hardly read it...and read the rules too please...
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WOW, as I read through this poem, I felt a whole bunch of emotions all of which were very strong. I felt sadness with a lot of anger mixed right in. I particularly loved the last 5 lines of this poem. the one line that stuck in my mind is this one:
Of course I don’t feel fucking whole
I have felt this many a time. great job on this.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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