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your eyes are the brightest of all the colors

chapped lips and a curved nose
and crooked teeth to go with it.
crystalclear brightblue eyes
lined with darklong lashes.
a semidefined jawline
outlined by a wellkept beard.
the face of an absoluteangel

Author notes

poem title is from the song Thunder by Boys Like Girls

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  • velveteen
    January 25, 2008
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    *feels warm and happy*

    this is cute. (:


  • Cyanide Milkshake
    January 13, 2008
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    I love how imperfections make the one's we adore seem so perfect XD xxx


  • lingonberries
    January 6, 2008

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    "the face of an absoluteangel", a description of a loved one... nice! I think it could flow better if you found a word to replace one of the crooked since it's now in the lines right after eachother. Keep it up!