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The Rain Leaves a Scar


I

rain shatters into small-pox scars
inoculating
summer against drought

II

clouds gather from the west
and the rains begin:

gentle drops finger
              leathery leaves--
                      burn with a kiss of passion
                      burn with a flush of shame
                      burn as the sun through a glass brightly

burn fretted flesh
and scour granite

leathery leaves
fold tightly against the rain
              rejecting the Passion
                        of this acid rain

Author notes

When summer is hot enough and the earth dust-caked, the first drops of rain can seem more destructive than life giving as they burst against the drought.

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  • Celticjedi
    January 2, 2008

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    Great job! You worked wonderfully with the title and created amazingly real feelings! I loved the description of the leaves, and how they recoiled from the rain when it started hurting them. Very different and unique. Thank you for entering, keep up the awesome work!
    ~Cj