Cleaved to the cusp
of reality,
mind drifts upon dreams,
spun and knotted
in hope
as heart melts
to highland song sung
in baritone whisper;
and as breathless sighs slip
in silence,
my eyes fall in surrender
to the warmth
of a Georgia sunrise
at midnight.
Author notes
Prompt:
"True love is like ghosts, which everybody talks about and few have seen."
-La Rochefoucauld
In a list
A contest entry
- A Deeper Love by poet2angels.
700 points, ended January 2, 16 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This write is full of 's' sounds - great use of alliteration actually
Who is that hunk in the picture?
Is he gay? 
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OMG! This is utter perfection. I love how it whisks you up and takes your breathe away. True romance and love flows here with great style. I can't wait for your book to come out. You've the touch lady
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sigh.
*sigh* ..this is truly beautiful.
i can picture it as i read.. i feel as if im there.. in the moment.
keep up the great writing
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The opening line is a keeper. I simply adore the thought. Love "spun and knotted in hope" Those words are deeply felt. They penetrate the psyche, and the soul.
"as heart melts
to highland song sung
in baritone whisper;"
I can hear these songs, and the clam in the voice. Lovely! Oh my dear heart, I am so glad to read the soft, gentle, loving side of your poetry again. I love the metaphor you use in the end. I also love Georgia. My grandparents we both born there.
This is most soothing!
I LOVE YOU ♥
MOM
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The cusp of reality
What a concept. Dreams spun and knotted. What great imagery -- your words are so well chosen. You have a great grasp of the "less is more" school of thought.
As I have mentioned before, I could learn a thing or two along those lines. My poems can be so wordy and overbaked and end up sounding like a Victorian high school student with a crush.
Thanks much for something really unique.
CaliOkie
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i feel like I'm on a hammock just kind of drifting into relaxation when I read this. amazing.
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Beautiful!
I love the softness in every line of this lovely poem...
I tried to find fav lines, but highlighted the whole poem, lol
So, I will just say,
Excellent job!
Lynda
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Superb! I see two phrases in this that are familiar! You told me you'd use them on the phone, and by jeebers you did!! This is beautiful, dear one....just beautiful! Such a deep and all consuming love is portrayed in this poem.
"as heart melts
to highland song sung
in baritone whisper;"
That Irish shines in this stanza, Girl! It's absolutely stunning, and has such a soothing effect, as well.
"...and as breathless sighs slip in silence..." This is beautifully penned, and with wonderful alliteration! How smoothly it flows when read aloud.
But, the ending....oh that ending....WOW!! I love how you have infused the richness and colors of a Georgia sunrise.....at night!! Brilliant! You Go Girl!! What a beautiful image to leave us with as this work reaches its finale. I love it!! Brava!!
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This is dreamy.
"as heart melts
to highland song sung
in baritone whisper;"
Whenever I hear bagpipes I dream of the beauty of the moors and the tender call of birds. Like this very much.
Wolfie
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No matter what we want or declare we need, we only have where we are. You bring this spiritual truth home gently but poignantly like a dart arcing througth the air to at last land in the gold.
So many in love try to hold on to forever, instead of right now. Take care of this moment and each one that follows and you will wake up to find you and all you love as passed forever a long time ago.
Beautifully sculpted words that elliicit a strong response from this reader. Thank you.
Love, Tom B.
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Beautifully written.
Georgia sunrise...
I love this one.
Well done.
-Saint
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I think this is beautifully done, my friend
Absolutely gorgeous
Wishing you the best of luck in this contest!
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