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Three Points Of Freedom

We stand here in honor of one of our best,
and mourn another hero as we lay him to rest.
He left here proud with eyes opened wide;
now they are closed with his honor deep inside.

A bugler playing taps just over the hill,

while all listened quitely & standing very still.

A twenty-one gun salute rips through the skies;

while taps in the background bring tears to the eyes.

 

A three point folded flag, white stars upon blue,

a bullet in each corner neatly tucked from view.

Is then passed along to a widow in black;

to remind her of a hero who was killed in Iraq.

 

He died a brave man in a war not yet won,

and now laid to rest next to his son.

It was two months ago his son was brought back;

he too had died upon the sands of Iraq.

 

Their chest hold proudly of the medals they wore,

it was for you and I they fought in this war.

An honor between soldiers, not just father & son;

laying side by side, their tour of duty is now done.

 

 

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"Driftwood" 10 years USN 1976-1986 (Assault/Combat Boat Operator BM1)

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  • darlee77 gold member
    July 21

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    Beautiful

    This is wonderful. I just attended a service like this for my uncle recently. This brought tears to my eyes.


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    February 14

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    this speaks

    volumes for everything a vet stands for, a father and a son, wanting to share themselves in the forces that they held, thank you for this entry
    MM

  • Kaelin
    January 18
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    Hey! It's been a while and when I come back, your poetry is still heart touching and warming. It really hits home even though I do miss your funnier tones and stories concerning a certain worm...

    Kaelin who loves to be back here


  • justgot2loveme
    December 8, 2008

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    Oh My does my heart go out to the wife and mother. I don't think I could make it through something like that. I am so very sorry for your loss.
    This is an excellent poem, great flow.
    Thanks for sharing and good luck.

    Justgot2loveme


  • Sandygram
    December 2, 2008

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    Very Heartfelt Poem

    Thank you sor sharing this beautiful poem. It touches this reader's heart. Thank you for honoring all military men and women with your loving words. God Bless our troops and God Bless America.

    Take care,
    Sandy


  • Broken Vow
    November 14, 2008

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    such a powerful write. it holds its own beauty and i like that. great job. the flow was excellent. keep up the good work!


  • SilverWolf
    September 17, 2008
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    great!


  • larkbird
    June 5, 2008
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    Captivating!

    What a beautiful poem! I really loved the flow of it, but the best part is just that it is such a fascinating and emotional family story, and so touching. That poor woman.
    This poem now has pretty much all of the awards that AP gives, which is cool, of course, but I think it has a couple more golds in it!
    Beautiful write, and congrats on your well deserved win.
    God Bless, Larkbird


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    very beautiful write, with a smoothe flow and rhyme, in honor not only of those who have died for our freedom in recent wars, but also in honor of those who died in the early wars and earned us the 3 points of freedom in which you speak. Beautiful tribute, in which you have titled so well. Congrats on the Gold!

    Blessings,
    Sassy


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    May 31, 2008
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    Its a very good and touching poem. I have had the honor to serve as a pallbearer in a military funeral and you have described it well. One sudgestion I would make though is correcting the rhyme in lines 7 and 8. Really thats it. Thank you for entering this contest into my poem.


  • N e a r
    May 26, 2008

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    You brought up a really sensitive topic to most readers. I'm one who cannot relate, but the idea of this happening is tragic... Sad that it does happen all too often. I like the rhyme sequence that went along with this as well. It adds an excellent flow to it. I would just suggest that the very last line be shortened to keep the ending flow - it felt too long and off-beat. Thanks for entering, and good luck.

  • Kaelin
    May 18, 2008

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    Oo. Very very touching, almost personal. I also hope this was not something you've had to go through!
    "A twenty-one gun salute rips through the sky;" is a very affecting line that I think will get most people emotional. I mean it gets me emotional even if I have the chance not to live that kind of thing. The memorial you made to all the soldiers is a grand one and thank you for writing it so beautifully.

    Kaelin


  • Elizabeth883
    May 17, 2008

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    Excellent poem, very touching and I hope its not based on something you had to encounter. Touching write.

  • Jokerman
    May 9, 2008

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    superb poem

    just read this and another of your poems my name is john. love them both you are a talented guy.great themes and great use of rhyme well done my friend.


  • coffeeangel316
    May 6, 2008
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    I vision this poem on a plaque for fallen heroes at a memorial site. It's beauty is beyond words. the tears that I have fought to hold back as I read this makes me stop and thank every man or woman that has died fighting for our land. great entry and thank you for letting me read it.


  • jcat gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    After reading this I just closed my eyes and thanked every soldier through history....You words were beautiful...I am humbled to have read them. Best of luck here but this is truly golden!


  • Pollycheck
    April 19, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my military contest. This is a very well written poem that has impeccable rhyme and a steady cadence. This is a write well done.


  • Rheea gold member
    April 17, 2008
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    thank God you have honor for your country and the men who gave all


  • daviscth silver member
    April 17, 2008

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    I'm sure way to many families can relate to your touching poem. Our men in uniform suffer so much.Good luck.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    March 22, 2008

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    Extremely well written. The theme is a pain known by too many families from countries everywhere. What a wonderful, although sad, story you have written. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • leander Moderators member
    February 16, 2008

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    This is a poem that will go straight to the heart of everyone who has relatives or people they know fighting in another country. War is so useless, I can't help wondering why so many people out there don't seem to get that.

    A tiny little oopsie in the last line of the second stanza: "backgroung" -> background

    Last stanza, line 2 has a grammatical issue: two times the word "for". I think it would read more fluently when the last "for" would be gone

    Thank you for entering this poem as well!
    Leander


  • Breaking Inside
    January 16, 2008
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    wonderful job this deserves the finalist list!!!!

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    January 15, 2008
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    Great poem, very sad, but its happening way too often.
    Great job.


  • karma-n-peace
    January 14, 2008

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    You took a topic that many write about and gave it a newness.
    This as with the rest of what i hae read of your work is absolutley touching.
    So very sad, you painted a vivid picture with your words, a sort of video of the mind.


  • midnight eyes
    January 9, 2008
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    Wow very beautiful. Keep up the great work.


    Amber


  • trista gold member
    January 4, 2008

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    Yes

    This is a very common theme, but I think there are plenty of areas that make up for that. I found it extremely touching, and wish you all the best with it.

    Good luck and best wishes,
    ~J.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    This here blew my mind. This has me misty eyed and wowed. Welcome back my dear friend. U indeed are here and kicking ass. Love it. Best wishes to you in this contest.

    Always
    Tory


  • catz Moderators member
    January 2, 2008
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    You've made me teary eyed reading this wonderful poem of love and appreciation for those brave ones who do so much to protect us and our freedoms. This truly is a poignant, touching poem.

    I see the contest just ended today and I wish you the best in the judging

    Dee

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