Everyone said we're not for each other
Yet your the only one who can make my
Heart heat up with love and passion
I don't care what others think
I truly do love you, the truth is
Before I even met you I didn't
Believe in this emotion that
Makes me want to just scream
Scream till I have no more voice
I had lost my hope but I found it
Deep within your sparkling eyes
The eyes I feel inloved with
You have this twist in you,
Makes you different, unique
And I would never dare to try
To remove it, I wouldn't change you
Your the one I need when
Life lets me down and I need a
Shoulder to cry on and an open heart
To comfort the pain and suffering away
Your my best friend,boyfriend
Faith, hope and love all
In one and no one will ever
Take you away, I won't let them
Don't EVER forget, now and forever
As seasons go, as days turn to nights
I will always call you mine
And you my first one true love.
Author notes
This poem is for 2 things: A poem and Ja Devalesa
Hope you like it luv
A contest entry
- My Contest! by lemonhead.
520 points, ended January 12, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any hints to improve?
Comments
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I'm your first one true love? Glad to hear it.
Nice; I like the start out. 'Everybody said we're not made for each other, but I don't care. It's a new take, as far as I'm concerned.
I noticed some typos...you wrote 'your' or 'you' instead of 'you're' a couple times. And perhaps after "take you away," you need a : or a ; or a -. Your call on which.
I really like the first stanza! Maith tu!
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