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Butterfly Dance

I has a butterfly once. Brilliant and delicate.Wings of stained glass. So elegant. I was the flame. Lighting her gypsy dance. Throwing our fates. To the winds of chance. The light danced across her eyes. Teasing chaos
Oh, those eyes...Crystal blue as the purest waters.Swirling around the emerald green. And if you gazed into them as I had, if you allowed them to consume you...you would notice the wisps of grey. It was like looking into a storm of passion and shadowed mystery. It was as if when Pandora opened the box this creature emerged and with it all the chaos in the world. So beautiful. But she flew too close to the flame...and I watched helplessly as the flames consumed her. Eager to devour such beauty. She cried out...but she was already lost. For th eflames of Love are undeviating. YEs, I had a butterfly once. Brilliant and delicate. Wings of stained glass. So elegant...

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I wrote this along time ago and I just found it. So I thought enough time had passed and so I may as well put it up. It's not very good. I think I was fucked up when I wrote it. Who knows right? Well there you are.
Written November 6th, 2003

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  • shatteredprince
    February 17, 2004
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    'Wings of stained glass' i love stained glass, this whole things really came through visually for me. I saw it. it was weird. I liked it though, it was so sweet. Good use of language.
    a shattered prince

  • PoisonedHeart
    January 19, 2004
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    Ah, I see...
    Hidden poems...
    Why didn't you ever show this to me?
    Its beautiful bev


  • NurseFloyd
    November 12, 2003
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    oh Bevin, IM ADDICTED TO YOUR WORK!!! ahahagahdsfjhsda... j/k But I must agree, I enjoyed this write. so yeah, STFU, your an amazing poet. =D

    ~Jenna

  • SternBlinkin
    November 6, 2003
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    Whoa..i don't think you were fucked up. I like it. The rythume is great, and it flows in a ever lasting circle. I love it very much. Telling of a girl that you once admired. A lady full of beauty and spirit, who was captured, and tore from you, but never the less you still admired her. I really like it..wow I'm like getting addicted to your work. Keep posting!!
    *Stern~Blinkin*