You move too soon;
I miss your warmth.
Please lay back down
and comfort me.
You live your life
too fast, its true;
just slow it down
and do like me:
Ignore the world
and lay with me.
©2007
1-1-08
Author notes
Written for the contest: Photo Inspired - 5-10 lines by AliceinPoetryLand
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2384170
A contest entry
- Photo Inspired - 5-10 lines by AliceinPoetryLand.
900 points, ended January 1, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A critical comment is invited
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Those cats have such lucky lives, eh?
There's a cat in my aunt's house where I live. I know exactly what you mean.
Cats are just... unique.
I guess we can learn from them that way.
Other than that I have to say this is a lovely love poem. I remember a time in which the last two lines were true to me and someone I loved. Your poem made me sigh.
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Oh, yes they do. And they know it.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. And applaud.
rous
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Nice thoughts wonder if it will work.....just tell the kids I am with the cats...
Good luck in the contest.
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They sure do not pay attention when I tell them I am in the bathroom!
Thank you for reading.
rous
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This is such a beautiful take on the prompt.
It's ten lines of an invitiation to leisure.
"Ignore the world
and lay with me."
Very nice.
Best of luck in the contest.
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I had a cat once that I swear did not move for eight hours. And, the two I have now will sleep anywhere: one likes the top of the aquarium.
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Aww this is beautiful! I loe the softness of this! Thank you so much for your entry
gaylene
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
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