He wakes her in night
Pressing a gun to her head
She whimpers and he strikes her
He strikes her again
She stops and looks at him
"I'm gonna kill you," he says
"After I'm done with you."
She cries out when he rips her cloths off
Undoing his pants he begins his conquest
Fucking her hard and making her call him "Baby"
When he's done, he shoots her in the gut
He leaves not knowing that she will live
When she heals, she hunts him down
She finds him and plots her revenge
Knife glistening in her hand
She creeps up to his sleeping body
Slashes his arm twice
Making a "X" on his bicep
He wakes at the first strike
To late to stop the second
"Blood for blood Baby," she tells him
Pressing the knife to his throat
She cuts it open watching him die
"Blood for blood," she whispers
Be honest and tell me what you think.
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Rawr!
Precisely. I like the story format this poem took & wonder if it started that way or simply took its own course. In any case, very nicely done. Thanks for entering & best of luck! -
Don't blame her! I'd go back and gut the bastard myself as well. Hell, I even want to cause some serious damage to some guys I know now and that's for sexual assault/attempted rape/ hitting me about. So imagine what rape/attempted murder would do to my rage? Men, watch out, don't even try it!
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aw sweet revenge
my kind of story.....nice write
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sounds like something i would do..
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This is a fab poem, the darkness bleeds through. The imagery is awesome. Very well penned, best of luck in the contest with it!
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very good
a interesting narrative
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Chills down my spine...
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holy shiz! this was very good! just wow. this sounds like something I would do... sort of... (well, not exactly that... but I would torture the guy! I mean COME ON! ha.) I really do like it though! keep up yolur amazing work!
Crimson -
thanks for sharing.. chilling well written you'll definite emtion react....
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Seems like it's written from a place of hurt.
It's harsh,blunt and chilling.
Considering the title then I would say the presentation is fitting.
You did a good job with the emotional aspect, you have made it impossible to read this and not have some kind of reaction.
Good job.
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