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Laughter Bouquet

Laugh and the whole world... will bust a gut

because laughter knows no boundaries

like wildfire blazing out of control

it'll spread from fields to the foundries

Everyone wants a reason to laugh

common trait found all over the world

never be ashamed to let it go

a chain reaction will be unfurled

It matters not your race, sex or creed

this language everyone understands

the same in every city abroad

as in the sparsest desert sands


So go ahead and get your laugh on

you will brighten someone else's day

then pass it on to all your friends

soon the whole world's a laughter bouquet

Author notes

foundries- factories where metal is produced and the only word that rhymes with boundaries....lol

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  • bird at rose
    May 6, 2008

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    Astounding logic

    This is fantastic, I loved how you especially started off in the first stanza with explaining what would happen when you laugh so hard you might accidentally hurt yourself a little physically or mentally. (lol, that's ironic?!) It is very good that you emphasize that a giggle is nothing but a noun not to be personified simply. "like wildfire blazing out of control" struck me tops from this piece as it nails down that things can get bigger when the chuckle can't stop itself.

    So true in the first line of the next stanza... sometimes we're sad but none of us like it that way, it's just the circumstances that are hard to comfortably get out of. Ahhh, this line is surely an obvious and main encouragement, "never be ashamed to let it go a chain reaction will be unfurled" if not gone past limits of what we should make as humor. I love "a chain reaction" for it can contribute to a couple of thoughts. One could be that once you start it, you can't stop the continuance, and the other is the other person may release a warm, happy conversation only if you give them a lovely chance.

    Verse number ten is so poignant. There are some that don't seem to laugh much, but if they get a reasonable hilarious situation they will know how no matter what they are. It's nothing to learn, just something to do. For instance, you could call it a hobby he-he.

    "then pass it on to all your friends
    soon the whole world's a laughter bouquet" is purely great with the spreading impact. But, you have to give an example yourself, and I appreciate how you planted the idea across in your own words. As the title, you picked a good preview-- we all want to be beautiful and suddenly bloom packed in a vase of earth.

    This poem holds a piece of truth, and I'm glad you wrote it. I thought for the contest, you had to do a one-liner but now I know better.

    OOPS, yet I'm happy for your understanding,
    PoetryInA-Keyboard


  • Frozentearz
    January 5, 2008

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    well know I think you have given us all something to share within this one laughter is the best,
    Thanks for sharing,
    Love you to bits.
    Tearz


  • superstition
    January 5, 2008

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    I'm one of the main queens when it comes to laughter I think it's safe to say!! I'm the kind of person that when something funny happens, I'll be the last one to quit laughing, and even after I stop laughing, I usually have one more bout of it come back before I'm really and TRULY done laughing. It's a little awkward while being amusing at the same time. Such a fun subject to write about, and just that much fun to read, as well.


  • stavykm gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    I loved this

    Laughter Bouquet is the perfect title. I felt warm emotions and a bit of a giggle. There is so much truth in your poem it is just so sweet. Thank you for sharing with me about laughter from here and from afar.
    Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm


  • daviscth silver member
    January 2, 2008

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    This is such a delightful respose to my prompt. I loved the last 2 stanza's. Thanks for posting and all the best to you at closing, Cathy

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