Waters Pure Essence
The river of life flows through me
Energizing and lifting me up
By its pure essence nourishing
Revitalising my spirit
The waters healing properties
Flow into the dark places
Remoulding tattered flesh and bone
Soothing bruised and battered muscle
The cool thrilling, tingling rush
Excites and gives me energy
Dispelling all thoughts of depression
And enabling me to rise and fly
The joyful, rushing, bubbling sound
Is only audible inside
Where it lifts my tired emotions
And restores to sanity my thoughts
My whole self is being made new
The water flows out through my pores
It springs through my soul and my flesh
I reach to transfer it to you
http://allpoetry.com/poem/907062
Written November 20th, 2004
Peter Tagtgren - Metal Genius
Blue notes weave around
My nervous system
Stunning me
Into submission
Opiate of the consciousness
Vibrates throughout
My central core
You flood my aura
With large slices
Of you
I want more...
Your music makes love
To me
Freely
Without ties
You have power
To sting me into a coma
Or sooth me to serenity
Drum beat echoes earth beginnings
Guitar screams in agony
Your voice liquidises bone marrow
Lyrics electrify the mind
Social consciences teased and taunted
As you rip accepted notions
To strips of flesh
Swallowing them
Digesting them to nought
With your acid
Before serving them up anew
As your offering to me
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3760528
Written January 1st 2008
Author notes
This is two poems for shewolfnative's contest. The first is from when I first joined, retracing my footprints in the sand, and the second was written today. Interesting to see how my writing has evolved!
A contest entry
- First and Last by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended January 4, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting difference
I liked the difference in these two pieces and even though there may be similarities I went to different places with each one. Great reading.
TC
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Your writing speaks at a core level and is so moving. You are right when you say that your writing has evolved so much. Great!
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Oh, the first poem is good. It tells me though..and the second simply opens up the door and allows the reader to be submersed in iamges and metaphors ...man that last few lines of your second poem....now the second is simply powerfulllllllllll!
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incredible on both pieces and both artist
love the analogy and descriptive process of water restoring sanity and then making love can soothe one into a comma.
Tamara
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Definitely a great poem for the new year!
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Your poetry is so full of life and passion. Yours are a joy to read. Blessings to you in 2008.
- joanne
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I really like this!
You just described the life of God inside the person.He does give us life and energy, too!
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