When in pain, with little hope
towards faintest light our souls did grope
where frosty circles our fingers hewn
their borders shimmering 'fore the moon
Quite a picture our faith does paint
'stead of dark, old fashioned, quaint
steepled church, horse drawn sleigh
scene outside our Anderson bay
Initials within a simple heart
on our window not far apart
from hope scribbled though it fade
before we painted, our fingers prayed
A contest entry
- New poem of 2008 by Loveandblessings2u.
600 points, ended January 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i luv it this is great work keep it up...
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Excellent
'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thank you for sharing this one with us.
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That was such a beautiful poem!! It was EXTREMLEY well written!! "where frosty circles our fingers hewn
their borders shimmering 'fore the moon." << BEAUTIFUL!!!
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Love this too... my favourite lines are the very first and the very last ones, especially 'before we painted, our fingers prayed'. There's a lesson in there for all of us. Well written and thanks for sharing
God bless!
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seems like true love to me.
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What beautiful thoughts and moments of nostalgia...beautiful imagery throughout with perfect flow and the last stanza is simply perfect...wonderful picture you have painted...
I loved it!
Thank you for sharing!
mystic
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so much observation I feel, and reminicing pasts and present, and wondering for the best for your futures. A Lovely prayer.
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Wonderful visuals in this. It's a blessing passed along.
Joe
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Gorgeous! I love the picture this paints. Fantastic, i just loved it.
Especially that last stanza....
There is so much to love in this poem. I adore it.
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I love the last stanza its so beautiful well it all is but i really like the last part... its soo nice....
great poem...
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This is a exellent hopeful poem. I enjoyed it alot.
my favorite part was"before we painted, our fingers prayed"
lovely.
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the last stanza really affected me, it was so lovely and the rest is good too.
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The wind that takes me where I want to go,
The sweet incense that makes me feel so high
That loving you seems all I need to know.
But it all sticks in my throat! It sounds too cute,
Empty as a wrinkled paper bag.
You won't believe it! Better I stay mute
Than offer you cliches that make you gag.
And yet I wish to tell you of my love,
If only love its own locks would remove!
wonderful and very heartfelt work.
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i love how it just flows
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Beautiful
Initials within a simple heart -
Beautiful poem
I really liked it
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Wonderful and well written. I actually enjoyed the ending lines the most.
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Awwwwww!
This is so sweet. Loved it all but the ending lines, "from hope scribbled though it fade
before we painted, our fingers prayed"
really made me say "awwwwww" out loud. Thank you for writing this.
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Very sweet and nice
Well written.
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Great picture you painted with words. Great imagry!
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" Like initials within a simple heart
drawn on our window not far apart "
If that isn't the most beautiful two lines I ever read, I don't know what is.
Truly a very touching and beautiful piece of poetry.
I enjoyed very much.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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This poem is truly beautiful and I really enjoyed reading this. You did a splendid job with this if you ask me. Best wishes to you & your poem in the contest and God bless you always in each thing you do and write. Keep up the wonderful work my fellow poetic friend. Happy New Year!
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This is so beautiful! My favorite lines....Like initials witin a simple heart carved on the window not far apart.........breath takingly beautiful imagery here! Awesome awesome awesome!
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