http://allpoetry.com/poem/2305778 Written: 07/1976
Autumn
Oh Autumn, how quietly yea creep into the summer,
Dancing merrily among the trees in your garment of many colors.
Though Summer holds her lantern, high among the clouds,
And gives not up easily to your misty shroud.
Resist though she may, surrender she must,
For changes are eternal and her time will come again.
So, weep not for Summer or the falling of the leaves,
For all has it's place, in the face of time.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3754160
Blissful Upon our Tongues Written: 12/07
Kindness is blissful upon the tongue,
An angel even at the funeral of the our divine spark.
She embraces our derelictions with rapture,
And takes our hand to chart the course to our essence.
Gathering clouds can not cast a shadow on her enlighten path,
Breeding grace through all of our atrocities, as well as those of others.
Mercy is her nature, no rapier does she bare,
She devours whole our vulgarities and offers her reign of humanitarianism.
Be our beating hearts black, she will shine her light of delicious lucidity,
And wing our near dead souls, home to our God's paradise.
So be philanthropic to all God's creatures, forgiving the splinter in their eye,
Impart a tender hand to restore them to their God.
Let the rush of kindness surge over your every conveyance,
And benefilence, like a winged Angel, will cradle you earthly existence.
A contest entry
- First and Last by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended January 4, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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All i can say is that this was something, i enjoyed both poems and live kind of how kind of the same they are but different too, keep it flowing and congrads on the HW
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Beautifully done
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Beautifully done
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Awesome
Both so vivid and mesmerizing reads, fine job -
Bandits United!!!
First of all I apologize for being late with my spotlight I have just been enjoying another virus brought home from school.
I always feel comfort with this border as your introduction flowed into my head my mind eased into the beauty that is the world and its colours which surround us. To stop and drink in your words I cannot think of a better way to start the day.
Then to read the second poem just complimented what God created for us to all partake if we wish. Linger in your lines ponder and soak from that eternal flame. Thank you for the pleasure of reading and for sharing these beautiful poems with us.
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Thank you so much for wonderful comments. It seemed that you really felt the picture I was trying to create with my words. A writer lives for those oh so brief moments....when they are truly understood.
Blessings & Joy,
Doris
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Bandits United
I loved your poem. I thought your praise inspiring. The first part was beautiful and the second part matched well with the first part. Congrats on your green trophy. -
BANDITS UNITED
This is your day in the spotlight; enjoy. Liked the presentation on this page; colors, pictures, sidebar, poem. All fit together so nicely. Lovely collection of poetry you have given us on these pages. No snow here yet, but supposed to come on the weekend.
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Bandits United
These both were beautifully written pieces. I also really liked the first piece the way that you described the season was great. The second piece I had to read twice so that I could understand the meaning of the bigger words within the piece. They were both great. Thanks for the reads
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
The first poem of the pair is my favorite, for you have so well described the changing of seasons. I like also that deeper meanings can be drawn from the piece, meanings that bring hope to one seeing the apparent end of good things -- it need not necessarily be the case!
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Bandit United!
I was delighted by both of these wonderful poems.
The first poem is so well written and really shows that you truly are in tune with the natural world around us. This is a wise and quite profound nature write.
The second poem speaks of the spirit and the great grace that that we are undeservingly heir to. Your words are humbling but also inspiring to acknowledge our great Benefactor of Grace. Thank you for sharing your wonderful writing skills and words of truth and beauty.
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit family today because WE CARE!
May God continue to bless you my friend.
Dennis
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Bandits United!
These poems compliment each other perfectly. The first one is full of rich imagery with a simple message that the seasons all have their place in the year and that we should not mourn the passing of time but accept it. The second poem extolls kindness - something we all need in our lives. Congratulations on the trophy.
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Bandits United!
What an amazing write so full of vivid imagery. I loved how they both fit so well together. I love Autumn although Mother Nature can't make up her mind where I live lol whether it's summer or fall. Beautiful write I so enjoyed reading happy Autumn to you and yours. hugs Theresa
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Bandits United!
Autumn:
I liked the constant comparisons between the two seasons and the almost personification of each of them. The final line was the icing on the cake! Bravo!
Blissful Upon Our Tongues:
I enjoyed this one, it was light and almost soothing in the knowledge that we will be forgiven for the 'splinter in our eye'. I liked the sense of hope and the realisation that we're not perfect.
Cheers
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Bandits United!
Two very interesting, original and creative poems! In the Autumn poem, I think you must mean "creep away from summer" -- don't you? That would make more sense and logic. Both poems are very well written, well worded and flow quite well. I think the "Blissful" poem's lines are just a little bit too long, which interrupts the rhythm. Perhaps a small re-wording or breaking up some of the lines and adding in-between lines might improve the flow and rhythm, only my opinion. Great work and you are so talented, it really shows!
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Bandits United!!!
These are both wonderful poems, very well crafted, and I can relate to the first one, and how summer does not give up easily, as she is still lingering on here, but I do feel fall in the air, so I expect sweet surrender will be coming soon. Great job! and I ejoyed both of these lovely poems...
Love & Light
Debbera
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Bandits United!!!
not one but two well written poems! both excellent in their own way. filled with vivid imagery they both make a statement and combined pack a wow! thank you for sharing your talent. keep writing! God bless you always
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UNITED BANDITS
What two very beautiful writings. First one has me thinking of our you worded Autumn creep in quietly How the seasons do come in so peacefully with all their beauty. Your last line sums it up truly does have each it's own place in time. The second is just as beauty in showing the kindness is personified.
Very well written and good flow.
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BANDITS UNITED WOW
A wise and thoughtful poet penned these two masterworks. I especially enjoy personification in poetry and create it beautifully. 
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Bandits United!
These two poems are both beautiful in their way I like the openess you show in seeing how much you have grown over the years as a poet 
I can only hope that I do too - wonderfully done - congratulations on the HM
keep writing
Pol
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Oh a lovely duet. I really like the autumn one so much, your images and feelings within it are glorious of the season. What expressive poetry!
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Bandits United
Those two poems mesh very well. I really love the imagery in the first one. I think you deserved more then HM>
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it is so nice if you can believe great writes love the rev papa
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What beautiful growth the two poems show. Do you see how your language simply stains the page with beautiful textures and adds so many more elements of images? This is wonderful. I love to see this growth... that trust being placed in one's Muse ( by whatever name we call it or palce it comes from).
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