The twinkle of your eyes,
put the light in mine,
your a work of art,
thought up by the divine.
How is it im blessed,
with such a great gift?
from the moment of your birth,
My heavy heart you did lift.
As we approch the new year i am thankful,
to share this life with you,
going againsed the odds,
something i never thought i could do.
There was a dark time for me,
not to long ago,
when no light could reach me,
not even a candles dim glow.
But you were the match,
That set my heart ablaze,
I know now i will be warmed,
By you for the rest of my days.
Author notes
I wrote this in ten min. so it might not flow very well... hope you like it any how. {type 9}
A contest entry
- My Last Contest Of 2007 (Quickie ends midnight) by poet2angels.
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is there any part that seems under developed?
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Good, just capitilize your i's please. love it, great take on type 9. love this part:
How is it im blessed,
with such a great gift?
from the moment of your birth,
My heavy heart you did lift. -
I enjoyed reading this write ~ it has meaning that is very touching ~ I know whoever this is written for ~ will be in awe ~ beautifully said ~ Nice job!
Thanks so much for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharig your work for me ~ Best of luck. -
fantastic love it
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Thoughts
Poetry in its finest essence, cannot seem to be viewed as 'incomplete' or not flow well. Keep penning (This is a compliment) -
such a peaceful happy poem done with pure love
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fantastic
For a poem written in 10 minutes, this is really great. There was nothing wierd about it. I loved the wording. I felt elated, i hope that's the right word for how happy i was to have read such a fantastic piece. -
I like this piece too, and its such a contrast to the poem you wrote on the very same day. As for writing it in ten minutes, sometimes poems are best when you can let the emotion flow right when you are feeling it.
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Wonderful
Its a great write. Its a bit more on the lighter not then your other poems. I like it, it shows a chance to move on and make things better. Its a great write. I'm very impressed with your ability to catch emotion. Keep it up.
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I liked the touching sentiment and the emotion in every line
TY for sharing this!
Lynda
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