This plastic life
suspended like fine threads
one lie knotted to another
like little rosaries all connected
fingered like pearlized thoughts
in womby padded places it grew
incense being flung by golden pot
water splashed
it makes no difference
if whom you love has split tongue
and half-brained ideas
about what femininity is
I raise a fist to pop this over-stretched veil
so honesty can chafe where it hurts
jittery whoosh and push of truth
spills hot on shrunk blossoms
wrapped in tangle of mesh
yet dangling to clink in evidence
I refuse this caustic pain, this saline solution,
and you, in your suddenly chauvinistic
reaction to my withdrawal from you
not because of you, but because I needed to recover
from the slash of your ultimate comeback for everything:
“You breastless wonder!”
Author notes
I am a survivor....by god, I am a survivor!
A contest entry
- breathing inside the pause by Cat.
1150 points, ended January 16, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I can only echo both Mary and Zayra's reaction to this poem. This one has the voice of victim that refuses to stay that victim and rose, victoriously as survivor. This is exellent poetry, Carol...I could feel this one. Good for you, woman - bravo, sister.
~ Nicolette
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carol.. this is excellent and empowered and makes me so fucking mad.. i hate him for you.. right now. i hate him..
rarely does poetry affect me in such a way.. im literally angry right now..
wow
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Yes, you are even more than a survivor...you are a guide and a transcendent soul that speaks with truth.
Thank you for this rich and emotional poem.
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Beauty in passion and strength in words. You are more than believable. Very assertive piece.
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You're not 'a' survivor hun, you are 'the' survivor, from which all others shall be shaped
This was vivid and painful and true. I have myself, with a slightly different angle, pondered that question of 'what is female' so many times. It is a question that chases itself into knots, best only asked with nimble fingers!
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Yes indeed.you are a survivor. A magnificent piece of art.
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Brava!!
Beautifully crafted such passion weaving in and out of your amazing imagery; the rhythm is fascinating Thank you for sharing this passionate piece from the heart
The word "womby" poetic license? Brava!
Have a glorious New Year!
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Dealings with Feelings...
You ALWAYS touch my inner true self with your fervency and ardor, m'Lady. I wish I had your strength, your resolution. Anyhoo, your passionate penning and Spirited Soul struck home. My Heart & head needed this, more then you will ever know...
"I raise a fist to pop this over-stretched veil
so honesty can chafe where it hurts"
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"I refuse this caustic pain, this saline solution,"
Thank you, Scribe.
I'm a survivor, too!
~ Nicky♥
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Beautifully penned and I might say the world is a little better place because you survived. Happy New Years! Hope you have a hundred more dear.
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I like the words you use in this poem. The message too that you tell within your poem is really nice as well.
Good job! Good luck in the contest too!
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