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Shall I Step Out

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In to a dream?
Or is it
a fleeting moment
of opportunity
passing
like a brief
refreshing shower?

Is this a wondrous
and exciting reality
where new senses
and emotions
will come alive
with renewed vigor

like the warm kiss
of spring
on a weary sapling

hungry for nourishment,
eager to reach further

than it has ever
dared to reach.

Author notes

The door is unlocked; will you open it?

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    ahhahaha wow, i love this, and about a door, hmm thats amazing, wonderful poem, and lovely write. love the flow throughout it!
    stephanie =)


  • Dalaney gold member
    January 6, 2008

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    socks were knocked off...
    this is a great take of the
    prompt, sweet Michael, and
    one you should be proud of
    writing. Love, Lane


  • LittleMoon silver member
    January 5, 2008

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    MJ you are a master at seduction. No wonder most of your comments are from women. We all dream of a man who would pen us words like that and this is a beauty of a write too.


  • alexandrathegreat
    January 2, 2008
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    Oh the last metaphor gave me chills. You'll rock her socks off for sure!

  • ashjoe76
    January 1, 2008

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    hmmmm

    Very impressive. You dare to explore the realms of fantasy so as it leaves so many beautiful memories while the deep dive to reality takes place ultimately.Great thoughts wrapped up in the best words. Congrats!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    wow!

    again... you leave me awe-struck and breathless with your words.
    You have been writing amazing poems lately!!!
    I love the sense of a bright future in this, the hope for more to come.
    I want to open that door....


  • BellaD
    December 31, 2007

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    I really like this economic style, yet beautifully descriptive poem. Great job and good luck in the contest.

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