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I Try

I try to write about the dark
It turns into love

I try to write about pain
It comes out as lust

I try to write about hate
It ends in happiness

I try to write about anger
It stops at the sadness

I try to write what I am
It becomes this

Be honest and tell me what you think.

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  • ellipsist
    January 1, 2008

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    I'd like to see more development to this piece - what you have right now is definitely intriguing, I just think there are more layers to it... this could have been a very multi-faceted write, but for the most part it leaves the reader wondering, although wanting more, so certainly, well done for that!