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Silence


Do you have to talk,
Because nothing speaks louder than










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If you don't get it reading it to yourself try reading it out loud and see if that helps

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  • ilovemygrape
    January 30, 2008

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    Haha, this is a good idea, well executed. You could accentuate the hard-hitting void of finality by adding some space over and under the poem; layout on the page can do a lot for this kind of concept. In this case, the bigger the physical silence, the more powerful the message.

    Thanks for entering


  • insearchofsweetness
    January 7, 2008
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    Ah ha, nice way to say nothing or should I say "silence". Very nice! Thank you for the entry.

  • Sign of the Swine
    December 31, 2007
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    Very clever, I really liked how it ended.


  • crimsondew
    December 31, 2007
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    Wonderful....speaks loud and clear...

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Oh I love this one thank you for your entry in my contest here is the link to part two of the challenge much love
    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2383964


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    wow this is an awsome write taken from the prompt but you might wanna shorten it as its meant to be 10 words just thought id let ya know well done on this though


    • LoneFairrie
      December 31, 2007
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      Thank you though... Better?


    • LoneFairrie
      December 31, 2007
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      Working on it still hold on just was my basic idea needed to fix it anyways

      • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
        December 31, 2007
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        hehe yes this is still awsome and so kick mine i love the way you end it it leaves room for the reader to think. sorry about before i just warni hate to see people get kicked out

        • LoneFairrie
          December 31, 2007
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          Nah its cool, I knew I was working on it but its probably a good thing you did or I might have forgotten why exactly I was trying to reword it.


  • Luken gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    I really like it! But...

    Then should be than in the last line Just a hint!

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