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Innocence Lost

That repugnant little worm,

So jealous of all the others,

So spiteful with his need to hurt,

That revolting little weasel,

Smiling as he stabs me in the back,

Fooling them all with his pretty face,

That sickening little creep,

Burning me with his ocean coloured eyes,

Scarring my soul with his innocence,

His screeching laugh that grates,

Like nails on a chalk board,

That repulsive little toad,

No soul could ever live inside that,

No soul would ever want to,

Devoid of any emotion,

Devoid of everything,

DEAD! 

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  • Lsh-x
    August 12

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    Wow. A very very intense write.

    The hatred you feel, it really vents from this.

    Great Job!

    Thanks for entering, good luck
  • wow, really intense, the loathing comes out loud and clear...your imagery is brilliant!
    I really enjoyed reading this,

    Thanks for sharing,

    Luck.


  • urapns66
    April 20
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    this is a pretty good write, i really like the ending it adds a sense of power to the write there is definitely a lot of emotion here and i think that in my opinion the end really sums it all up and kinda drives it home. well any way good luck in the contest and keep up the writing.

  • Cat10
    April 20

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    really powerful piece! such wonderful emontion, really great job! good luck in all of your contests!

  • Titus gold member
    January 7
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    wow, some ex's are going to love this one, so much venom, it sings revolt here. I liked immensely.


  • markgrif gold member
    January 1
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    w00t!
    Preach it! unless its about me. lol

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