I watch your mouth
making wild patterns
in bright splashes of
monosyllables.
I nod.
I smile.
I shrug.
watching, all the while
your words fly in the air
& I try to catch each one
as it falls and breaks,
leaving
holes
behind.
raking up excuses,
dusting up apologies
I watch as you lose
the words
that fall-
like torrents
onto your
smile.
I finger them-
the three that
say
‘I love you’.
& leave the rest
that say- ‘it’s over’.
Author notes
PROMPT:
Across The Universe (The Beatles)
1.
Words are flowing out like endless rain into a paper cup, they slither wildly as they slip away across the universe.
USERNAME: checkmate
A contest entry
- Double the Lyrics by Morrigan Trinity.
525 points, ended January 31, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Dude... franky, this was confusing... its like a mixture of the lovely essence and angst, heart-break! this is definitely different from your ordinary poems... very unique!
raking up excuses,
dusting up apologies
MY favourite lines... lovely description dear friend... and there was powerful imagery in this! keep writing okay? love ya!
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Love the poem. Your take on this lyric is awesome. This is exactly what I was gunning for. A unique expression. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck.
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