She goes through life unnoticed
A faceless girl beyond repair
Giving all that she has to everything
Yet feeling nothing but despair
Yearning for a tender love returned
But nothing comes to love her back
Her heart is slowly breaking
While the demons steadily attack
A shattered soul floats about
Never changing on the outside
Still doing all that she does
Her emotions she knows how to hide
Will anyone ever love her?
Will they learn to show her love?
Or will the take all she has to offer,
Until her unnoticed shattered soul floats above?
Author notes
Just....writing....
A contest entry
- 2007 - everything under 25 lines by leander.
1000 points, ended January 17, 2008, 167 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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the first couple of lines really got me...it was great through and through. great job
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She is loved...
By God and me...a sad write so powerful!
A hug for you!
Regards,
Jennifer
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One little oopsie in last but one line: the -> they
I think you have captured quite some painful and sad moments of this girl within your lines. In fact, I'm pretty sure a whole lot of people who read this will be able to relate to the feelings you described here.
Thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Speechless
Damn emily you are such a powerful poet. You know, I actually read this one the other day but wasn't really up to commenting. But now I will. I love it. I can feel your yearning and the love you hold in your heart. I must say though, that you are far from unnoticed and I will never allow your soul to shatter. I will hold the pieces together while I glue them back in place. I need your soul, it keeps me on solid ground and helps me so much. Our souls are so alike it is amazing. Great job here my dear. Oh and by the way, you are loved so very much you just have to open your eyes and see,
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