pale-washed blue-in-black
until the rock
being struck—
shatters
and sharp fragments
cluster
lazur-like
microscopic pock-scapes:
knolly meadows brightly drused with snow
secret caverns ripple-lipped in blue
glassy moss-crusts crumbling to grit
each spiraled twist of wrist
or jittered lens—each flensing glint
reveals one
small intense spin-
glittered crystaled Omniverse.
A contest entry
- The Essence of Stone..... by torn dragonfly.
700 points, ended January 16, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Nets are Down! by BellaD.
450 points, ended February 2, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful exploration of an alternate universe that co-exists and offers itself up to examination. Reminds me strongly of Blakes grain of sand.
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I'm honored by the comparison to Blake. Thanks for that and the gracious response. Both much appreciated.
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Great imagery!
Beautifully written verse. Great job and thank you for your entry. -
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Many thanks, and for the contest as well.
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beautiful description of a geode. You are gifted with a great sense of how colors relate and inter act, of sensation and how it stirs, your words scintillate with movement. Wonderfully done.
Welcome to the New Year,
Tom B.
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Actually I know what you're describing here in both instances, nicely done and yeah, some sample specimens do appear to be their own little universes...of beauty.
I have a large sample, about 4 inches by 1 1/2 inches by perhaps a quarter inch deep cut specimen of the largest solid piece of chrysolla found in Arizona, at least up until about 5-6 years back. Its not polished yet, but nice as it is for the time being.
the great copper mines are about 45 minutes east of me and an hour or two SE of me, with lots of chrysolla, Azurite and dozens of other beautiful minerals.
there has been a major copper find east of us near the old mines of several tens of millions of tons of ore but it will be about 15 years before they are extracting and processing it. Just two days ago we drove past the rod and bar facility and there were many thousands of lbs of shiny copper rod and bar lying outside.
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Loved the descriptions in this! Great ending as well
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Sometimes I wonder where you get your insperation. You write such beautiful poems, each one of them painting gorgeous images for us to ponder over. You have such talent, the poetry world should look to your poems, because you truly show emense talent and ever growing skill
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Inspiration for this one was easy. I collect mineral specimens, including a couple of pieces of chrysocolla, a deep blue-green mineral, covered with azurite crystals, which are cobalt blue. When I need a lift, I take my jeweler's loupe and spend some times cruising through the valleys and caverns that the magnifying lens reveals. From there, the poem simply came.
I appreciate your comments very much, especially as they touch on visual elements, which are my favorite to work with. -
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What a neat thing to do! I love visual anything. I could not imagine a world without visual. I am glad you like my comments, I try to express exactly how I felt and what I saw when reading. Poetry is like a picture you paint in your head as you go =3
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It is amazing to look closely at a mineral, a crystal, even a garden rock. The colors and shapes, textures, angles, the light. I've written a whole sequence of shorts based on different minerals and rocks. Remarkable, haiku-like beauty.
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When I was little I use to love to dig through rocks. I wanted to be an archyologist. I use to go hunt down unfinished garnets with a friend in California when I would visit family. You've inspired me to get out there and remember a old childhood hobby =3
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