we have endure
yet so afraid
for love to me
is like an echo
that soon fades
yet could it be
what some says a song
would be my
heartbeat
that still
beats
now
A contest entry
- The Sound and the Fury by demetrah10.
600 points, ended March 10, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is quite interesting. Your use of broken English lends a sense of innocence to this piece and childlike earnest. The theme of this, although common, is lovely - and so true to the human experience. This absolutely resonates. The music in this is what makes it strong. Thank you so much for entering. I truly enjoyed reading.
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This a good short poem, but the first stanza we have endure yet so afraid Did you mean endured, even that doesn't make sense with the second line, theye don't mesh.
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Ver beautiful
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Hmm, this is good... a bit on the shorter side lol but the flow is nice and i like the format. Thanks for entering my contest, best of luck!
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Great j0b. i l0ved it. it reminds me of a p0em i wr0te and a guy i kn0w. i really l0ve it. please return the fav0r. ~dani~
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soo sweet and true, love can be strong or fade away. thanks so much for shring this. success in the contest.
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