Oh Marionette,
Standing tangled and mangled
Lifelessly pulling, struggling
Thoughts of no escaping
Obey the master that forces you to move
Feeling so tired,
Weak in the knees...
It's too late for hesitation
Bow before you think
Commence every command
Faking smiles once again
Oh Marionette!
That music box playing
Can't you hear?
It lulled you to dance and tranced you
Paralyzing your fate,
Please awaken!
Your strings may be at liberty
But pretend it's part of the act
Just fiddle through the floorboards
There you’ll find the razor hand
Remember, it is all part of the act.
Fight firm through the lies
Stray free of the scams
Once you run liberated
I promise you’ll feel alive once again
Setting foot upon a softer surface
Feeling the wind upon your face
Memorize the sensitivity you were born with
Let it wander free.
Oh Marionette hear my plea!
Don’t let them treat you the way they treated me
Take hold of your dreams
Stronger than they make you keep hold,
Tied onto those strings.
You’re just another victim
Break free, please!
Don’t become a lifeless nothing,
Just as those pawn masters have made me
Trapped in a musky cardboard coffin
Pushed aside, hidden from the rest of life
Like those who could never speak out
too scared to fight...
Oh Marionette,
You are real, please perceive!
A heart and soul fully beating
If only you believe
Those strings are all a lie
You will truely see
Just believe...
Author notes
Being controlled mentally & emotionally being abused is a heartless act many innocent people get put through…
dont ignore the pain your heart feels just because that person may have the upper hand
stay away, stay strong, live free of harms way and stay close to those who understand and love you option 3: Make me believe=poems about hope
A contest entry
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Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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wow! that's all there is to say, just "wow!"
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I think you need a comma after "marionette" and that "standing" should be capitalized to match the rest of the capitalization of the entire poem. In the third stanza, "cant" should be "can't." I also think that your question mark is misplaced in that line and should be moved to the 3rd line of that stanza. "Entranced you" makes no sense. It seems that "but" would fit in, "Your strings may be at liberty, but / pretend it's part of the act." ("Its" needs to have an apostrophe). You also don't need a comma after "it is" in the last line of that stanza. Please clean that stanza up. Let me know if you do. An exclamation mark after the first line of the last stanza instead of the period would work wonders. Actually, you could do that after every "Oh, marionette!" "Marionette" could also be capitalized because it represents a person.
Other than that, I love how this poem is written. It's so encouraging and empowering! It's very powerful and fresh! GOOD JOB! I think this has potential; please clean it up and let me know. I'd love to reread it!
Good luck!
Jen >_<
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