Why does my life have to be so hard. I try to help people and make them happy but all it does is back fire on me. I need to make my self happy but I can't seem to get it right and I can't get anybody to help me. Sometimes I just want to die and not care about what it will do to anybody but I can't beacuse I care to much. I care to much about people who could care less about me and just wish I would wither away or just leave the face of the planet. The onley people who really care about me is the one who turned me on this site and thats joushua bartmes and I thank him everyday for this.
A contest entry
- A whatever emotions contest! by dreamersalwayslive.
600 points, ended January 13, 2008, 28 entries
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hey this is a good one. You are welcome man, we are like brothers till the end.
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Aww.
How wonderful he turned you to this site! The feeling in this is quite clear to me. Don't want to die or wither away or leave the planet; want to stay. Even if it's becuase that one friend. But just as some constructive critism: You may want to go through and captilize all of your "I's", and go through and put some commas and some line breaks in there. And you may want to fix that only lol.
Besides that great poem, put you should read the rules! I won't delete as long as you read the rules within the near feauture and do what they say! ^_^ -
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thanks
hay thanks for the review and sorry about not following the rules its just i just started this poetery thing so im sorry -
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lol
it's okay it's an easy fix anyways just read #4 and do what it says 'cause you already followed the other ones lol
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