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The Token

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The Token

Don’t bite the hand that wears your ring,
it’s stronger than an iron chain.
Remember it’s a sacred thing,
a bond for two that will remain.

It’s stronger than an iron chain,
a symbol of eternity.
A bond for two that will remain,
pledging our fraternity.

A symbol of eternity,
a never ending ring of gold.
pledging our fraternity,
a love that never will grow old.

A never ending ring of gold,
a wedding ring for all to see.
A love that never will grow old;
this token that you gave to me.

A wedding ring for all to see;
remember it’s a sacred thing

this token that you gave to me,
Don’t bite the hand that wears your ring.

 

 

 

Author notes

Pantoum:
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

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  • Ellis gold member
    January 7, 2008

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    I dropped your ring into the vat
    Of food cooking in which I spat
    I spit in TIKI FOOD for luck
    Too hot your ring is to pluck

    Some cool dude will get your ring
    That my CAT FOOD can will bring
    He can eat it with the hash
    Or can toss it in the trash

    Tiki Cat, loyal to a fault


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    A beautiful pantoum filled with truth, warmth and tenderness of emotion! Best wishes for this wonderful piece and a Happy New Year to you as well!

    Frogz~


  • daviscth silver member
    January 2, 2008

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    This is a great answer to my prompt. Thanks so much for posting it and all the best to you at judging, Cathy


  • Swan song gold member
    January 1, 2008

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    You could sing this here is a little singer for you


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Have I the cheek to comment in this form
    I used to write these things at school
    Your poem is so lovely round and warm
    My comment just the jottings of a fool

    I used to write these things at school
    When I was rather freer with my rhyme
    My writings just the jottings of a fool
    Who liked to find a way to fill the time

    When I was rather freer with my rhyme
    I wrote these verses just for me to see
    I liked to find a way to fill the time
    Because I found they set my thinking free

    I wrote these verses just for me to see
    Your poem is so lovely round and warm
    Your writing seems to set my spirits free
    So I've the cheek to comment in this form


    I know I shouldn't develop the lines but I always have, sue me!


    • Amera gold member
      December 31, 2007

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      hehe: It's sad when the comments are better than the poem. Thank you

      • cricketjeff gold member
        December 31, 2007
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        If I ever achieve that on a poem of yours that isn't a limerick I shall retire my pen!
        But thanks for the huge compliment.


  • And Hyetal
    December 31, 2007

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    Very beautiful. This is a piece of dedication, and I think the whole theme of it is wonderful. You should definately do well in this contest.

    Wow, this form is confusing.

    Always,
    Cassie


  • BellaD
    December 31, 2007
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    Love it!

    Another beautifully penned poem, Amera. A joy to read.


  • PerVirtuous
    December 31, 2007
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    I am glad that you feel dedicated to your man. So many people do not take relationships seriously, and want to run away when the going gets difficult. I am pleased that you know better than this. It will help you greatly in your life. This poem speaks to me.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    Ahhh, Amera, you are as indisputably a deep romantic as I and this proves it. a soothing lyrical write softly invading the senses like the feel of gold on one's chest and neck.



    dad


  • StarEyes
    December 30, 2007

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    How do you do it? another form I don't think I have seen...

    But you know I love it! Something in this one really caught my eye and held my attention!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

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