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Bird Watcher

Missing image

 

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The birds are playing

somewhere else today

and I have no sunflower seeds

to tempt their appetite

or wet their thirsty minds

with sweet dreams of spring

 

The shadows against the flaxen sun

are long-legged and piney

and they sway

with the breezy music

humming in the background

 

But I just sit here in this chair

and watch the empty sky

so full of life

and wonder where the birds are

 

 

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Image: http://blaumohn.deviantart.com/art/minatory-II-112671576

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  • just rob gold member
    January 5, 2008
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    Like a still life with poet

    I can even see and hear them...elsewhere.



  • poetryality silver member
    January 3, 2008

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    I am a bird lover...I never seem to miss their flight, no matter where they are but I have had the odd occasion of wonderment when I didn't see any in the same space with me. Your poem takes me to those rare moment. Very descriptive and clearly visual. Sigh~ Thank you for this entry in Zayra's contest. I wish you the very best.


    Much Love & Light ♥

    Renee


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 3, 2008
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    I liked the reflective quality of this poem... there is a sense of peace and serenity here, despite the absence of birds. I especially liked the visuals of this line "The shadows against the flaxen sun are long-legged and piney" - and the way that line links with the picture - wonderful imagery there! A lovely poem - thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Heart Sutra
    January 2, 2008

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    I like the use of words and descriptions in this poem. I especially like the appearance of the sunflower and its various attachments. Very well done.


  • misselaineous
    January 1, 2008
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  • Cat gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    i do that also- before they come
    to the feeder- where are they? where do they spend their day
    when they are not feeding at my house?

    i love
    or wet their thirsty minds with dreams of spring.. that is stunning
    i really like this one.
    m

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