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Slow time

 

 

 

It is in love

that I soared amongst

an angel’s whispered dreams,

as she disentangled reality

with unshakeable belief,

and smoothed the

bewildering hollows

in my thoughts.

Though years have flown,

I look at her through

a rhapsody of slow time,

my naked mind

still in awe

at the beauty of

her silken wings,

as she shelters

in the cradle of my heart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • davidwright silver member
    February 3, 2008

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    But for memories where would love reside. Very good it swept me away with a touch of nostalgia. Happy trails.


  • astralshepherd gold member
    January 12, 2008
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    your poem is pretty nice, all in all, and i love the gentle imagery but your line nine reads " " is very distracting and you might want to fix it...but then it may just be on my end, internet explorer is my browser so i may not be able to view it correctly.

    blessings and best wishes,

    ~r.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    January 11, 2008

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    Check out line 9! Something is seriously wrong with your computer! Or maybe mine. Or maybe it's AP's fault. It's a glitchy thingy.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    at the beauty of

    her silken wings,

    as she shelters

    in the cradle of my heart.

    well this is the secret of the love..which you have explained in your wonderful poem..well done...



  • just mercedes gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    so good. /bewildering hollows/ is great. /rhapsody of slow time/ is brilliant. the final two lines perfection.

  • Bad Bill
    December 30, 2007

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    This is beautiful, especially from the line beginning "Though years have flown" onwards. Lovely use of language and poetic expression.

    Bill


    • sarajaneUK
      December 30, 2007
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      Thank you Bill for the fab comment, much appreciated. The first half of the poem represents the times where he needed her love and guidance to ease him through the turbulence in his life, and my language here is less ‘fluid’. The second part, he has ‘grown’, and their love is more balanced and rounded - ohhhh what I would pay, to know a love like this... big sighs

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