This girl comes before You and quietly kneels at Your feet,
wishing that You could hear the words that her heart sings.
This girl wishes to thank You,
for by capturing her heart,
binding her soul,
You have set her spirit free.
Only with You is this girl safe,
safe to grow and to explore,
to learn about herself even more.
This girl’s only desire is to give of herself to You,
for with You she knows that she is now complete.
No longer lost and stumbling in the dark,
this girl is now found and owned,
she is where she belongs.
This girl owes so much to You,
Your time, patience, love and care,
all so willingly with her You shared.
Your strength, discipline and Your laughter too,
has given this girl so much knowledge,
growing within the love that she has for You.
It is more than a slave’s heart that this girl places in Your hand,
it is who she is, her being,
her soul begging to be freed within Your love’s boundaries.
It is more than the heart of a slave You hold in Your hands,
for it is me, it is who i am.
Author notes
entry for Master Ktulu's challenge
Each of you will be given a link to a different picture. You are to find inspiration from the picture, however, the challenge will be that each of you will also have a word that you must use as inspiration as well.......the stipulation is that you can not use the word anywhere in your poem.
shimmer.......word (submission)
Pic http://bdsmdvdblog.com/wp-images/gallery/bdsm.konstantin.ochepkov.art.of.bondage.001.jpg
why i should win this challenge, good question, ok i'm menopausal with extreme mood swings and if i didn't win i'm not responsible for any rampaged i may go on. add in the fact i am trying to get used to a new computer and work out all the kinks, my mood swing just went up another notch, so it would be safer for the world if i were to win. if that doesnt work then how about i am a single mother of forty and trying to make it on my own ............ ok too much reality shows and going for the pity factor here. i really don't know why i should win but i do know that i have had fun in your challenges as always and that a few times i have had to write what was out of my comfort zone, and i hope that during those times that i managed to do something decent enough that didn't make people shake their heads in disgust.
last round of challenges you had i didn't even know what a limerick was and yet i managed to write one, this round i have never read a ballad and yet again i managed to write one. i have had the chance to read and learn about different styles of poetry that before i wouldn't have bothered with. i have never been too crazy about poetry and yet by doing your challenges i have started reading more of them and my eyes have been opened to the many different wonderful styles that are out there that i have never known or heard about before.
my favorite part of challenges were the stories. to me they were the easiest to write. i really can't name any part that was the hardest or what i didn't like as i enjoyed every challenge you gave us. it was a tad bit hard not to write some of the things hardcore but i managed
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge FINAL round by Master Ktulu.
2250 points, ended January 10, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A slave's soul
you have revealed as I your layers have peeled. You have brought a new strength to this lion's heart and now I will assume my most desired role.
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Holy Moly!!
What a piece You have penned and the images just grab
This girl’s only desire is to give of herself to You,
for with You she knows that she is now complete.
No longer lost and stumbling in the dark,
this girl is now found and owned,
she is where she belongs.
Congratulations on Your HM!
-throws confetti-
Wooooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Love this!!
also Your comment in the AC
why i should win this challenge, good question,
ok i'm menopausal with extreme mood swings and if i didn't win i'm not responsible for any rampaged
i may go on. add in the fact i am trying to get used to a new computer and work out all the kinks,
my mood swing just went up another notch,
so it would be safer for the world if i were to win. if that doesnt work then how about i am a single mother of forty and trying to make it on my own
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I was ready to hand You an Academy Award
Love Your sense of Humor!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes tooooooooooooooo
and much love~ Desire~*~
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lol thank you Desire and congrats on your win
i would be honored to have the Academy Award, i've only had about 20 billion acting lessons and would be thrilled to see they finally paid off, not to mention that it would make my acting coach Richard Simmons proud of me.
it was great working with you as well as writing beside you and i look forward to reading your wonderful words.
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I loved the soft side of submission you showed. I loved all the references to the beautiful things that submission is. I live this life and there are moments like this all the time. The age old way - that of dominant man and submissive woman works for me. I think Master would love this too. You did a fantastic job here. Well done.
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Tanzanite i'm glad that you liked this and i hope your Master does too. when people think of submissive and Dominants they only think of the dark side and pain and such and that isn't what it is about and i wanted to captured that and glad to see that you saw that.
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This was a wonderful sensual write from you my dear. This is worthy of so much, I could just feel and experience the submission without it even being stated, the emotions pouring from this is perfect.
Best of luck to you in this part of the challenge.
Riftkin
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thanks sweetie for comment. i really enjoyed working with you on last challenge, it was a blast and i hope to work with you again in another of these challenges.
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Oh my ~
I don't know how anyone else will see this entry.....but I found it alluring and sooo sensual to my reading senses ~
I felt such a calming submissive Tone in your entry, and I think there is alot to say about a Poet who can take *submission*, and make it as touching as this ~
I do, however, think there is a bit of punctuation that could be looked at, to make your Flow much more easy....but after the 2nd read, it was no problem....so it is very little indeed ~
This part here gave me such a *loving and honest* perspective on your entry..>>>>
It is more than a slave’s heart that this girl places in Your hand,
it is who she is, her being,
her soul begging to only be freed within Your love’s boundaries.
It is more than the heart of a slave You hold in Your hands, it is me, it is who i am.Don't forget to answer the questions in your AN, pertaining to the ones asked of you in the Challenge by Master Ktulu ~
The best to you in this Final Round Shim ~
Bear ~
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awwww Bear thank you so much for your kind words and advice. i went over it and made a few simple changes so that i hope that i corrected all that you saw wrong here.
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I really liked the loving touch you gave to this. It is a rare find to see the softer and loving side to a Dom and sub relationship, KUDOS to you on that.
A couple of things to bring to your attention...
1. The line limit....25 lines no more or less as stated, you have 26. My suggestion would be to tighten this up a little and make it read better at the same time. That will kill two birds with one stone....
2. You must re-read the rules because you forgot some things in your authors notes.
Overall, What I see before me here is a good piece, with potential. With a little bit of reworking and editing this could really be something special.
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i reworked and answered the questions in AN. i wasn't ignoring you but was busy with trying to get computer set up and running. hopefully this now reads smoother with the changes i made. thank you for your patience Master Ktulu and for the great picture you gave me to work with.
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this speaks of the greatest things love means. To give your all to be all you are and can be
Joe
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