Your laser eyes
Pierce deeply
Darkness is light
To you
For you see all
Please understand
What I do
It is not
That I hate you
On the contrary
You amaze me
You are a mirror
And
When I perceive you
I realise myself
In my flaws
As long as you live
I will be as dirt
For your light
Shines so strongly
It eclipses me
So know my admiration
As I slaughter you
On a tree
Author notes
Through Pharisees eyes.
A contest entry
- A Reason To Kill by Girl With Guitar.
600 points, ended February 11, 2008, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hello Aslanlight.
All true teachers are true mirrors, for their undeniable ability to show us our self warts and all means most of us will look away if parts of us are recognised within our self. Not only that, it can not be denied that not all the warts would be seen or recognised for we do not want to face our self. I have read the comments so I know you are not on about yourself; and my view on Jesus Christ is neither here nor there.
The poem also of course speaks of fear, those who are not strong, secure within themselves are in constant fear of this eclipse. Which means their soul was not in its rightful place, for they are ruled by the ego.
Your poem also speaks of the strength and beauty of the few who are grounded within themselves; no need to attract attention, no need to boast, or compensate, for presence itself emanates in all directions. You present an interesting hypothesis in this piece, and it is written well, with some good insightful lines.
My regards.
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Well penned.
Congrats on the Bronze!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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I really love this. What a wonderful way you have with words. I can easily relate to the poem. Thank you for sharing. Shancy.
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this is brilliant. i hope you get the gold
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wahoo awesome write, I love it!!!
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Although I had to google "Pharisees", I actually really liked this.
It definitely fits into the contest but in a very unexpected way. I love the sense of being shadowed away. Excellent work and thank you for the entry!
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Love is like a magnet and opposites do attract as you so well demonstrate here.
great metaphor and meter
Tamara
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Ouch. I hope this is behind you or that you will be able to put it behind you soon. These clashes of minds leave no scars that most are able to see, until perhaps a poem or book concerning it is put out. Thank you for creating and sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care,
AD
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It's not where I am at all; I was pondering the reason Jesus was crucified. He eclipsed the Pharisees and Romans.
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Sorry. I thought you were writing of a personal experience. Thank you for clearing this up for me.
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