The Musette, created by Emily Romano is a poem that consists of three verses of three lines
each. The first lines have two syllables; the second lines have four syllables, and the third lines
have two syllables. The rhyme scheme is a/b/a for the first verse; c/d/c for the second verse,
and e/f/e for the third verse. The title should reflect the poem’s content.
Stop Abuse
Who hears
plaintive crying?
Deaf ears.
Closed eyes.
Fragile spirit
dead lies.
Life lost,
shallow the grave.
What cost?
Stained cheek,
for tender soul.
I'll speak.
Raised voice
throat spewing words.
What choice?
Touch hearts,
defy the hate.
Change starts.
Heart Prints
Welcoming
Enticing
Soul searing
Branded
hand print on heart.
Humming
in anticipation,
Rough whiskers on palms
create weakness.
Craving,
pining for lips.
Generous brush of breath.
Skimming gentle landscape
of your smile,
with butterfly touches.
Sizzling are my emotions.
Firing with charges of
sensual responsiveness.
Undercurrents and undertows
threaten to pull me in.
To a lust(love?),
unexpected
consuming,
yet utterly satisfying.
What a precious rascal you are!
Author notes
this is a write both for my heart and for a challenge...
I can't honestly say I think I'm the best... poetry is subjective..and being the "best" isn't up to me..and seems a conceited attitude to take...LOL... my goal is to just make people think and enjoy... peace everyone..and thanks
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3579074 link #1 and link 2 .com/poem/3685828
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Very impressed! What an amazing poem, and quite an interesting but for me unknown form you have put your well choosen words! Very well done!!
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Dang hunny! Your page is simply divine. The form you chose was a risky one.... but it proved worth the risk. Not all could have made that form work like that!! It was volting and full of energy!! The second... Ii felt was a bit rocky compared to your norm, but still pulls at the reader! Your talent has shown brightly throughout this challenge. You have made the other contestants nervous.... they knew your talent was fearless. Great work! Good luck to you!!
Love,
Mel
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A very creative choice for your form poem, and one I’m not familiar with. I will NOT be trying this any time soon, I think I’m too “wordy” of a poet to ever pull it off.
The brevity of it makes for a strong impact as long as powerful words and images are used...and you were very successful in that! 
Beautiful formatting of the poem also. So often I cringe when I see abuse poems, as many either preach or are very emotional but unfortunately cliche. You’ve kept from falling into either of those traps, and reach out to the reader wonderfully.
Your second poem doesn’t have as much power, but then it would have been awfully tough to top the first poem.
Still, I felt you had some great imagery and emotion laced throughout. I admit your first stanza had me worried about the whole poem being a “list” of adjectives (remember that nouns and verbs are where most of the power is) but you pulled away from that nicely to reveal a very lovely read.
Your author note is a great reflection of what I’ve felt about your poetry throughout the season. I’ve found it unpretentious and simply enjoyable; often times I’m not sure you’ve given yourself the credit you’ve deserved, especially when pushing through the challenges that were more difficult for you. Good luck to you in this final round, and in all your writing hereafter. It’s been a joy getting to know you and your poetry.
Best wishes,
~J.
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Hi, this is a new form for me and I found it very interesting, lovely poem, it works very well with the form chosen, must get round to trying it. a super write, hugs Di
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Hey there my Friend ~
OMG!
I soooo enjoyed this Form......I have to try this one out soon!
:)
You have presented this Form with grace and style ~
.....and.....I will begin by saying.....this is one of the most thought provoking writes I have read in some time ~
You have touched this Reader.....and when a Poet can do that....they did a great job on their work ~
Simply one of the best....if not the best, entry I have seen all Challenge long ~
OK....for your Form..>>>
You have one heck of a powerful Quill in the Finals my Dear ~
You are setting the bar for all the other Poets.....I have seen some sensual writes in my time.....but you have just earned a way onto my Authors' page if you will say Yes :)
Love to post it, and credit you of course ~
:)
I could sure use your talents over on my new website....hint, hint ~
I can not critique this 2nd write, except to say I saw a bunch of places where I would have liked to see you slow the Reader down...so that we could grasp everything you presented, without too much being shown in one breath ~
hehe ~
Other than that....2 wonderful entries :)
The best to you and your continued talents in the Finals,
Bear ~
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Desi,
I absolutely love your chosen form. It flows well and the beauty of the style that it is in, just makes your piece beautiful.
Your freestyle piece, is great. It has a bit of abstractness to it and a bit of metaphor too...excellent job!
Though, your last line...."What a precious rascal you are." I personally feel should end with not a period, but a !
Overall, a job well done.
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This is absoutely breathtaking and gorgeous. Sad and Torteous. so very clever and intense.the imagery is superb.You have penned this supremly.
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This is so wonderfully amazing. "Change starts".I love the rhythem and the flow~
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