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Ramble

Happened yet again,
Lost another one

But I'd finally found my faith again,
I'd finally found something to believe in again,
I'm not just going to let it go

Dead on arrival,
I never really understood that phrase
Until now

I will not surrender, will not abandon hope...
Not again,
No, never again

And maybe Providence rewards devotion...
Maybe there's something or someone
Who appreciates this unconditional surrender...
Anyway, this is my belief,
And it makes this hurt a little less.

It just feels so right, doesn't it?
It does to me,
And I honestly believe that this truth
Will eventually be revealed to all

So... what am I saying?
I guess I'm saying
That I'm going to take this all with this pasted smile,
Wear my happy mask, go through these practiced motions,
Because I'm still young,
And have plenty of time to wait...

And truth always prevails, in the end.

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Written November 5th, 2003

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  • Falmarin
    April 26, 2004
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    hey I liked this, saw you on the online list and thought i would check ya out...anyway, I liked this because it expresses the hope after pain, I am in this situation now, wanting to have hope wearing that "happy mask" as you put it.... pretty cool poem

    ~Falmarin~

  • bl0nd3ath3art
    February 18, 2004
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    Great poem. I absolutely loved it (and the background..hehe). I agree with the "pasted smile" part. Ive had to wear that all too much. It gets to be so fake though that sometimes even that doesnt work. I love the very last line in your poem. Great Job.
    ~Kristie

  • mydream
    November 6, 2003
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    The "pasted smile", hmmmmm, I've been there! The "happy mask" seems to be a must in these times! Loved this write, keep it coming...~angella

  • libby16
    November 5, 2003
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    This is a good write. Um I liked reading it. I understand well at least what I got from it a lot of what you are talking about. I really like the last line"And truth always prevails, in the end." that is a really good line. well good job. I really enjoyed reading this. Good job!

  • Alissa Ann
    November 5, 2003
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    Wow, I really like this piece. I'm not EXACTLY sure why. It just...sounds good. *laughs* Does that make sense? I can really relate to the last stanza. The whole pasted smile, happy mask, practiced motions bit. Sometimes the only defense I have is to just pretend I'm not upset. Then nobody can comment on my true feelings. Anyway, awesome write...keep it up! Hope to see you my side of Allpoetry sometime soon. Thanks for sharing!

    --YoungUnwanted

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