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Gods silenced blow

Bowl calm clay cloud

Could evil gods lips

Slip nameless reviews

Viewers silenced, mutilate toneless acts

Cast nude sensual roses

Sores toned until quiet earth votes

 

Stove silvers, thicken imprints

Misprint saw cosmic recede form below satin

Saint omits moist flesh fires

Fries lured, sharp tired shout

  

South terrain saw not fear

But

Fare gods silenced blow

 

Author notes

every word within the poem can be made into another word.
plus the last are first words of each lines are made up from the same letters

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  • Titus gold member
    December 11, 2008
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    I've just seen your notes: I thought so, wow, good


  • Titus gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    I'm sure, by my past expereinces, there is a feel for decipher in this. I'm working on it, but if I'm not mistaken, there are anagrams amongst the discord I feel. especially, "Misprint saw cosmic recede form below satin /Saint omits moist flesh fires. 'Misprint', being the prime incentive, as a clue. Unlocking that, the morale here speaks of the bowl, which really is all of our exisitence, and the fries/fires anagram as one belonging to possible acid rain, not fat fried, . and the apocalyptic graph your are portraying. Nice read.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    January 7, 2008
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    Very clever.


  • Amera gold member
    January 5, 2008

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    Wow! I love this read! This piece reads so fast and has so much imagery. You left out any word that wasn't necessary and still created a wonderful flow and painted a scene. The anagram is perfectly evident. I like it! Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • WillAlwaysLove silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    What an interesting poem. I loved your choice of words. How beautiful your words are, I loved it. I wish I could write like you....teach me!


  • haikumonk gold member
    January 2, 2008
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    Wow... this is really cool... intersting word play.

  • Cinnarry gold member
    January 1, 2008
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    F awesome Laura! wow!


  • penman gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Excellent

    Vivid images, teaching in metaphor masterpiece, each line a lesson in itself. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Lily of the Valley
    December 30, 2007

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    A challenge to the mind is stimulation for the future and you have met this challenge with your usual enthusiasm to produce a work well thought about. Good luck in the contest


  • AngelicMistress gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    Excellent.....

    Laura:

     

    This is a masterpiece of words.....

    It's word play is shown intriquetly and perfectly,

    thus demonstrating a whole other world  beyond

    it's own words.....

     

    My hat's off to you, this is awesome, I had seen this done, but,

    once before your piece, and I can actually say that you

    have been blessed with and art, cultivate this, and soon,

    everyone will be reading (book) you noncessantly.....

     

    Thank you for sharing with me on this site.....

    Blessed be always with  love and light,

    Your friend in Pen,

    AngelicMistress...Tanya 

     


  • raggyann
    December 30, 2007

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    this is a thought out master piece
    your words made this poem
    and the pic was perfect togeather
    i had so many images with this beautiful poem


  • Blueskywonder
    December 30, 2007

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    What a head f**k.LOL
    How did you do this?
    an intriguing piece unravelling layer upon of meaning in its mysterious content.
    Well done Laura. This is GREAT!


  • PerVirtuous
    December 30, 2007
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    Much better and impressive. Excellent job!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    I dont know where you found the time to do this...This is awesome. It took me awhile to change the words..lol
    Great job on this one girlfriend...
    Soulful Womman


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    wow this is an amazing write and must have taken agesssssssssss to write. how did you manage it?

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