They dance in the red glowing ball
their langorous lengths twist and turn
as snowflakes of ash swirl and fall
while branches keel over and burn.
The sparks crimson-spitting sink down
as flames spurt blue tops like a crown.
Red-gold drifts away into smoke
and smouldering coals cool to coke.
Author notes
The form is a Sicilian 3/4 rhythm with some dotted bar patterns. It is inspired by Rebel's "caractères at elémens de la danse."
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Beautiful. A very well written Rispetto filled with wonder and delight. You have penned very well for our contest. Well done poet. ~Pamela
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Filled with heat both in the visuals of flame and the Sicilian beat. Wonderful and full of rhythm's passion.
Blue
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Very pretty. The rhythm is amazing that you have here, and the image you put in my mind was vivid and yet so beautiful.
I really enjoyed reading this write.
Great job
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TearsofO
Hi there and happy new year. Glad you liked this one. I had fun writing it. Talk again soon.
Joy
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