She dwells between two worlds in thought
in seashells is the message brought,
as she listens to the tones
she hears the past like leaden stone.
Telling tales of long ago
when all lived freely down below,
until the day one siren sang
and sailors on her tunes would hang.
To get too close they'd hit the rocks
ships were broken, lives were lost,
on lips her name became a curse
so many lost as they traversed.
This mystic place is now denied
and sailors by this rule abide
so now this mermaid's all alone
for never will a love be known.
For those before her she's condemned
to live deep under just like them,
and sometimes you may hear her cry
hear the shell, she may tell you why.
In a list
A contest entry
- Fantasy of The Sea * Picture Inspired by ennovy.
900 points, ended January 8, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a good piece, sad songs, a lament, the siren whipsers her own dreams and fears as the waters ripple her heart.
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i like it alot i love your choice of words. your very inspirational
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I only ever heard the sea in my shells.Never knew you could use them like mobile phones A most enjoyable read I can see why it collected a worthy gold
Excellent
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congratulations ...
for your most descriptive poem that flows ... you used imagination & imagery to share an age-old tale. Well done! joy
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You put in beautiful thought into this poem and it was well written except that I felt that certain rhymes here were forced.Neways, congratz on the gold
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What beautiful verse, truly amazing! If I could find a seashell in my house, I'd call her right now.
"For those before her she's condemned
to live deep under just like them,
and sometimes you may hear her cry
hear the shell, she may tell you why."
Siren, reel me in, it is just as important to die well as it is to live well.
Thank you so much for entering our contest.
Brazos
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Wonderful hun, I have to laugh at jcat wanting to remove her entry, I feel that everytime I write something in a contest you're in, what a great compliment to you!!! wonderful again hun
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Well I guess I can remove my entry from this contest cause this makes all the rest seem insignificent.... Wonderful job!!!! WOW.....just wow!!!!
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Beautiful imagery come to life in this read. You have given the readers a very vivid picture..Thanks for entering our contest & Happ New Year...novy
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oh wow this is an emotionally filled write which really brings the picture to life with deep detail. well done gran and best of luck
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