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Hold On

 

 

 

Don’t bite the hand that dries your tears

gives you love, dispels your fears,

don’t bite the hand that keeps you close

hold it tight instead.

~~~~~

Don’t bite the hand that offers you hope

gives you strength, helps you cope,

don’t bite the hand that makes you smile

hold on tight instead.

~~~~~

Don’t bite the hand that gives you so much

brings you alive with a gentle touch,

don’t bite the hand of the one you love

hold it tight

forever.

~~~~~

~~~

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  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 2

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    What a lovely melody put to words. It sounds like it came straight out of a broadway musical. Honestly, this sweet, simple poem just SANG!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    Exactly Sue! Why do so many do that?

    This is fabulous and such a good reminder never to be ungracious with the gifts we receive from others!


  • Amera gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    I really love this and I needed to read it today of all days. I wish everyone would follow this simple rule. Perfect!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 28, 2008

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    I love the music of the love around the each word and around the each line here..thanks for sharing this piece my friend....


  • Ellis gold member
    January 12, 2008
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    Otstanding

    I think thie is a terrific poem. Great Message.
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  • ecrivain01
    January 8, 2008

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    Thanks for entering, but ...

    this is really far too simplistic for this contest. I have other contests and I would encourage you to enter some of them. I already have far more really good poems entered in this one than I will have trophies for even counting the fact that I will be doing a second chance contest.

    There are many contests on this site that you could enter and probably do well in. I'd say enter some of them. Good luck with that and Happy New Year.


  • ronnica
    January 4, 2008

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    Excellent response to the prompt, I have just been telling my daughter the same thing, I like your work it is so meaningful, rich and stylish,


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    January 3, 2008

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    This is lovely. So often we do hurt the people we love and give us the most closeness and support. It's like,"biting the hand that feeds you". It's a universal tragedy to hurt those we love, and I am afraid that this underlies domestic abuse. What a wonderful message you give here, that we should hold the people closest to us even closer and love them even more- because they are all we have. Sometimes people push those they love away because of their own pain. Your poem is great advice for all of us this New Year. Best of luck in the contest!


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    Beautiful with so much truth and enlightment in poetic verse. Great rhyme, flow and message! Best wishes in the contest and I hope you had a great New year!

    Frogz~


  • Gwenevere
    January 1, 2008

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    No biting, only loving this year.2008 the year the tide turned.good luck to you and yours in this special year, Ros


  • maa gold member
    January 1, 2008

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    thank you for sharing such a touching and beautiful poem with us ... this truly is a message of loving kindness, humility and unity ... wonderful ...

    have a blessed and prosperous year 2008 !

    maa


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Oh, how true!
    I think the second
    stanza is my favorite...
    it moved me to reread
    three times! Love, Lane


  • arafura gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Wonderful...

    I love this! You have really hit the nail on the head with this one my friend. Good luck in the contest!

  • Michael P gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    Sweet!


  • moonbumps silver member
    December 30, 2007
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    Good luck dear Suz with this touching write.
    xxxHilly


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    And so it should be

    Good


  • daviscth silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    Thank you very much for taking time to post in my contest. All the best of luck to you at judging, Cathy


  • Quill
    December 30, 2007
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    beautiful xxxx

  • Bad Bill
    December 30, 2007

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    One of the best poems I've read by you (and that's saying something). Tightly rhymed and the content is spot on. Excellent.

    Bill


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    Very good write here

    I like your poetry and is very loving and gives excellent advice


  • Lily of the Valley
    December 30, 2007

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    Truer words could not be said. We sometimes take for granted those around us who give us love and strength to get through the difficult times in life. It’s all to easy to give them a hard time or completely reject them for many different reasons but it’s only when they are gone that we realise what they meant to us. Far better to take a step back before that happens and take note of what we have and how much they help us.

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