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Him and Her Part 7: A Change

As the scratches on his face started to bleed again, she turned around, hoping he couldn't hear her weep.
He put his hand on her shoulder, hoping it would calm her down a bit.
She shoved his hand off of her shoulder and went farther away.
He followed her;
she turned and faced him,
her eyes filled with tears;
two wet rivers flowed down her cheeks and onto the floor.
Seeing her like this he grabbed her hand and smiled warmly.
He pulled her over to the fire and let her cry on his shoulder.
She wiped her eyes, trying to keep him from worrying.
Another crash and another rumble
soon following it were the pieces of ceiling,
now another opening closed.
She knew that they were running out of time.....
She squeezed his hand and got up.
She studied the last two openings;
She knew that if they wanted to find a way out that they needed to see which one was their way out.
She grabbed his hand,
he understood what she meant.
He went over and grabbed a log from the fire and used it as a torch.
They chose the tunnel closest to them and started down it.
They heard another crash;
she grabbed his hand and ran.
Pieces of the ceiling fell behind them,
closing their only way out.
They both hoped that this was the way out.
After a few minutes the tunnel split in two.
They weren’t sure which way to take.
She searched around for another stick;
she found one that wasn’t very wet.
He caught the stick on fire.
They kissed and hugged each other,
incase they wouldn’t see each other for a while.
They split up,
he went in the one on the right,
and she went on the one to the left.
She felt cold and alone.
He ached everywhere.
They trudge on.

She kept walking,
having much of her stick to burn,
she felt fine.
She heard another crash,
far off in the distance.
She then heard a scream.
She rushed to where she heard the scream.
It was him.
She pulled the pieces of dirt and toughened clay off of him.
She dragged him away with one hand holding the torch.
With the torch gabbed into the clay walls she saw the he was not breathing correctly.
She put her ear to his chest,
his heart rate was faster than normal.
She looked around,
but all she saw was the walls.
She picked him up,
the wait of his body almost crushing her very being.

She ran away from the crushed rubble,
and toward where she hoped was a way out.
She saw light and ran toward it.
Her arms soon grew numb;
he had passed out early and was limp.

They were finally out of the tunnel.
The siren was still wailing as the night grew longer.
The stars seemed to be on fire.

He struggled for breath,
she soon started to worry.
She set him on the sand, out of breath.

He regained consciousness again and stood on the sand.
He was happy to finally be out of the tunnels.
He saw her standing next to him,
out of breath.
He grabbed her hand and smiled at her warmly.
Tears of joy swelled up in her eyes, to see him awake.
The sirens wailed again.
They both looked up, seeing a storm coming from three miles off the coast.
They ran toward the city to warn the people.

The city was a ghost town.
No one was there.
They searched in every place possible,
but there was no sign of any one.

They soon felt strong winds;
She turned around and saw a giant funnel type storm coming from the ocean.
It was a
hurricane.
She knew they had to find shelter, and so did he.
They both ran,
hand in hand.

They looked around for the nearest boarded up home.
They didn’t see one within eye distance.

She feared they wouldn’t find shelter in time.

He saw her grief and squeezed her hand tighter.
She felt uplifted by this and soon regained a positive attitude.

They ran away from the hurricane;
within a few miles they found a place to stay.

They ran into the small home and bolted the door with everything they could find.
They knew that this hurricane would be completely different from the others.

They sat down on the old lumpy couch;
and waited for the life changing storm to take its toll.

She sat in fear, looking up to him for bravery.
She rested her head on his shoulder as she heard the sirens wail their warning ballad.
He secretly was scared to death,
but felt he must be strong for her.
He kissed her forehead,
making her feel like she can take on the world.

The wind howled, telling all that the storm was almost there.
Lightning soon started to dance to the beat of the wind.
Together this was a show, fit for only God himself.
The sun set and showed brilliant shades of pink orange purple and red.
The hurricane added the main attraction to the piece.
As the thunder rumbled it added a bass and tuned in rhythmically to the crash of the lightning and shaking of the rain.
Together they made the band from Mother Nature.

Still inside the small house were Him and Her;
She had fallen asleep, her head in his lap.
He stayed awake, alert of the dangers that lurked around him.
The storm still whirled around the house, drowning the lower half of the town in water.
Their hearts connected at this time, though she was sleeping, her dreams were filled of their future together.
He held her hand as she slept and knew that soon the storm would be right over them.

Soon water started to seep through the door crack.
He saw it and shook her violently to wake her up.
“What is it?” she said sleepily.
He only pointed to the water seeping through the crack.
“Oh my goodness, we have to get out of here!” she jumped up immediately,
grabbing his hand and ran to the roof.

The winds whirled around them and her hair danced freely in the wind.
He looked into her brilliant eyes and saw a better place beyond the horizon.
He knew that,
no matter what,
she must live to see beyond this storm.

She looked at him and knew in and instant what he was thinking.
“If we fall, we fall together,” she said above the winds.
He kissed her,
and their hands squeezed.

The rain soaked their hair and clothes.
The storm soon flooded to the top of the door.
Then they realized they had no supplies.

As the winds howled and the lightning crashed
they were dripping with water, and could barely hang on to the roof.

They held hands tighter, to keep from slipping.
Then a crash of lightning showed the falling powerline,
heading

for

them!!!

They split in different directions to dodge the giant electric pole.
She then heard a splash
and started to yell his name.

He had slipped when running and fell into the repulsive waters.
He couldn't tell where he was, but swam towards lighting at the top.

The rain still poured,
but here wasn't anywhere near the roof top

she was on.

 

He swam and swam,

trying to find that roof.

 

Suddenly he heard another crash of lightning and a sharp crack.

All of the sudden he felt this horrible pain in his head,

and everything went black from there.............






TO BE CONTINUED................
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yes, you will be suspened once more....
lol, hope you keep reading!!!

Author notes

#7#7#7#7#7#7#7#7is now here!!!!!
link to part 8: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3877385

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Comments

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  • OMGOMGOMG!!!!!!! this is almost to much...lol

    • thanks again, I'm glad you're enjoying the series. Gaining a reader means a lot to me(and my characters).
      I'll have th link to the next one in the Author's Notes in all the Him and Her's(if there is a next one) keep reading.
      If you have any opinions or just want to tell me how I can improve Him and Her please tell me.
      ~Annie Rose Shadows


  • Ms.spooki
    March 4
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    Brilliant.

    no other words,its the story everyone relates to in a way.you are truly amazing.


  • Angel of Diamonds
    April 10, 2008
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    :S

    he really should have died by now... its his fate isnt it lol. brilliant write xx


  • Captain Jenny
    April 6, 2008
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    AHHHH!!! GET 2 THE END!!!


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    January 14, 2008
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    like the part about the hurricane...u r putting this in a story, right? Good job so far...keep going!

  • lyrebird
    January 5, 2008

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    Yes, very suspenseful...
    Sorry, I am still reading, just had a lot to catch up on after going on holiday for a month.
    This is great, when's the next part coming?
    *shakes you*
    What's happening next???

    - Jojo x sinnocence


  • Downloaded Love
    January 4, 2008
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    OMG!!!

    WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME!!!!! (cryin voice) LOVE IT..... Suspensful? Heck Yea!!!!


  • Perfectly Imperfect
    January 2, 2008

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    I liked this, however it's not quiet what I'm looking for.. You do have a nice way with words, and I'd like to read the previous parts to this Well done and thanks for your entry x


    • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
      February 23, 2008
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      If you want to, #8 of this series is now out, if you want to see what happens!♥

      -Annie
      (author of the "Him and Her" series)


  • warrior-eagle
    December 30, 2007
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    Now THIS is suspense Lol


  • faithwhisperer silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    You know...just a thought, maybe you should write this out as a story also, Annie. It's so strong, but with the narrative element, I think it would work, and you also tie poetic images in. Very nice, but I'm beginning to think I'd like it to be a story, because the long format and changing from shorter to longer lines is a little distracting. I really like it, so keep going!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    You have a wonderful way of telling stories

    Very well done here and it held me in suspence the whole way through

  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    December 30, 2007
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    I need help with a title for number eight...


  • Falling.Again...Xx
    December 30, 2007

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    Much more suspensful! I love this, it makes you wonder now what happens next. Great job once again!!!!!!


    ♥Summer Moonstone♥


  • Bohemianwriter
    December 30, 2007

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    AWESOME.

    omgggg crap i have to go..so for now il say it was a fukin amazinggggggggggg write, the ending left me in tears and anger......il leave a better comment once im back..AWESOME WRITE!!


  • xxHaleyxx
    December 30, 2007
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    i love this one but the ending is wrong i want to knows what happens


    • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
      February 23, 2008
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      #8! it is here!
      Have you read it yet?!?!
      (Just reminding everyone, incase they haven't gotten my previous message)


      -Annie♥
      (author of "Him and Her")

  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    December 30, 2007
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    im editing it to make it more suspensful!!!


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    December 30, 2007
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    ok guys, i know it wasn't that suspensful, i tried not to do that this time so that I wouldn't be bugged half to death, lolz, well #8 will be out in January.....


  • And Hyetal
    December 30, 2007

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    yayayay for #7!!! A really suspenseful read! Great job!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • missrockstar
    December 29, 2007
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    omg i love this story poem
    its soooooooooooooooooooooooo
    great
    write more plz !!!


  • Falling.Again...Xx
    December 29, 2007
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    Liz!! Again I hate you! You make this more of a book, than a story or a poem. I think the end could have been a little more suspensful though. Great job as always!!


    ♥Summer Moonstone♥


  • warrior-eagle
    December 29, 2007

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    Mm.
    It was good,
    but..
    It feels as if it is the end,doesn't really at the end I mean leave you in suspense,if that makes sense, but it was good nonetheless.

    ..Simply Me♥

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