Just when I thought everything
was going to be ok, You took it all away.
I thought we had something marvilous and great.
But in the end you threw it all away.
All the time we spent together,
all the time we talked.
Was it all for nothing?
It seems that it was.
Reading the message on the screen,
Thought of you of us running through my head.
Laughing to hide the pain,
thinking it was a joke.
There I sat alone again like when we first meet.
I was broken by another and your gentle loving touch,
gave me hope that someone could love a creature like me.
Stubborn and Shy did that push you away.
Was it something I did?
Or something I would have done?
I committed my life to you body and soul.
I really ment everything I said about our love.
But What I thought was LOVE wasnt true.
For true love is broken by what others think.
So what I though was wrong.
Our Love was never TRUE!
A contest entry
- Write Me Your Best--- INVITE ONLY by daviscth.
6000 points, ended January 11, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ouch! I know that pain alot. I hope things are better now. You penned alot of feelings in this and it is really good. Keep writing.
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Wow!
this is a very amazing poem I can relate to this I have been down that road I know the feeling you express yourself very well :] my favorite part was "But What I thought was LOVE wasnt true.
For true love is broken by what others think.
So what I though was wrong.
Our Love was never TRUE!" wow sounds like sadness , pain, hate, anger keep up the good work and marvious writting
god bless you
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Great work! I loved every line
Your amazing....good luck!
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I though I would check your work out, Dragon Aleph is my bestfriend so I seen you on his favorites. But thanks for the comment.
Count Crimnson Maryian
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raw emotion
I like raw emotion, it's one of those feelings you cant take from anyone or force out on paper.
Great job on showing us how you really felt.
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I hear you. This is really really good Justin. ^.^
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I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you so much for posting and all the best luck to you at judging, Cathy
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This is the feeling of the heart..and sometimes feelings are changed..let us see what is the truth ahead when we are dealing the love...
well done..and thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem...
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