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The Twilight Hours

The golden sun lay sleeping,
blanketed by the darkness
of the velveted solar sea.
The moons soft glow becomes
the lovers night-light.

In each others arms they lay,
here in the night-time hours.
The ardent touch of
the black sky above,
veils their hidden truth.

If only in their arms,
the sun lay sleeping for eternity.
To spend this lifetime
together in the twilight hours,
no sorrow to burden.

For with the suns first light
as it awakens the new day,
the truth they conceal,
hidden from all the world.
Weeping the dawn of the day.

Author notes

"Oh how I wish to go down with the sun
Sleeping... weeping... with you"
- Nightwish, Sleeping Sun

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  • Tattboyspet silver member
    June 20

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    HA!!! And you say you can't do sensual?!?!?!
    what's this then huh huh huh???
    this is truly beautiful and so deserving of the silver: it painted pictures of quiet alone time with the one you love and just being able to breathe them in
    lovely and well done!


  • Celticmoon silver member
    January 12

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    Well littel brother I have to say you have done it once again. Your talent is growing very well if you ask me. You don't give yourself enough credit. This was a really good and I enjoyed it. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!

    Blessings
    Bel

    • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
      January 12
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      Sis

      Thank you for the encouragement, you know that I am my own worst critict of my work....

      Good luck with the judging it looks as if you have alot of reading to do and it should be tough..lol

  • Ghost of a Siren
    January 5
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    Breathtaking, absolutely exquisit! I loved this piece, dazzling!


  • Systems Malfunction
    January 1
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    Loved this poem. Great write and nice images. Bonus points for using Nightwish as inspiration.


  • A. L. Armocido - AM
    December 30, 2007

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    Thank you for this fresh piece. I like that you chose option one, I wasn't sure how much I would get from that but you did a lovely job with this. I think it was very emotional and tender. Thank you for entering and good luck.

  • Erotik Rose silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    Well it's about time you got back to writing You have done a great job with this poem

    In each others arms they lay,
    here in the night-time hours.
    The ardent touch of
    the black sky above,
    veils their hidden truth.

    I like this.

    Keep up the good work and hope to see some more from you.

    All my love
    Elizabeth


    • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
      December 30, 2007
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      yea, i guess its been long so wheres yours, its been longer for you...

      I love you
  • shortyjo
    December 29, 2007

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    Beautiful write, painted a romantic private moment picture, felt like I was looking in. Lol. Love the ending, and the way you describe this moment. Magical
  • Fatal
    December 29, 2007

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    I read this while listening to the song and I must say, I was moved. You did a great job! Good luck =)

  • Heavenly Angel
    December 29, 2007

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    My friend, this is a wonderful piece! I love this!
    Sigh....
    Wishing you the very best in this contest, hon!
    Best wishes always,
    Sandy


  • freespirit51 gold member
    December 29, 2007

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    Beautiful piece you have here kiddo. This is so romantic and very heartfelt as well. Two lovers under the night sky, how romantic...great piece and good luck in the contest.
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