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My Sweet Addiction

I cling on to every word,
that passes between those perfect lips.
Such perfection, such passion!
I feel almost whole as I listen.
You read from the pages of my soul,
a depth only one has discovered.
Only You.

I cannot tear my eyes away,
as your angelic form floats beside me.
So full of grace! So full of life!
I feel almost transparent from the light.
You see right through my shallow exterior,
to the inner workings of my mind.
Only You.

I cannot hear anything but you,
every song sung expresses your beauty.
So melodic! So full of feeling!
Floating about with the sound,
soaring high above the staff, you
pierce my armor, and tear down my walls.
Only You.

I cannot bear to tear myself away,
I could not live without your scent,
your smile, your laugh!
I'd be empty without you near.
My soul is nothing without you.
and with only one is my soul complete.
Only You.

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  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    February 26, 2008
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    I love the repetition of "Only You"....quite the terrific piece...


  • Blooming Poet
    December 29, 2007

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    Your repatition adds to your point. You used words and puncuation to craft this beautiful poem. You are very lucky to have someone who evokes this kind of feeling. I really have nothing to critique this is flawless from my point of view.